Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Pursuing education for every individual is trivial. School opens a lot of doors for a persons' career. But, for learning, a person needs an educational institution. Educational institutions give the right guidance for a student in the field of study they want to build a career. The prompt conveys the message that educational institutions do not encourage students to pursue an area that does not lead them to success. I can't entirely agree with the statement in the prompt for two reasons.
At first, the current day and age had burgeoned drastically compared two or three decades ago. The ever-expanding technology is because of world-class education and also the resources which are accessible very quickly. For instance, if a girl wants to know how the new CCTV technology, that is, how police catch criminals on camera in areas consisting of large crowds, needs to understand how artificial intelligence along with machine learning works. The two fields are connected to another field of satellite communication. At first, the location of the accused is tracked. The location is captured by satellite, which will give an image for the police to understand which place exactly the criminal is. Now, a concept known as neural networks is used, which will enhance the image and will give a clear picture of this image. Now using artificial intelligence, the face of the criminal is matched with all the people in the crowd. Upon finding the police can track the criminal and catch him. To capture the criminal, the police need a person who is sound in these fields. People who want to pursue a career like this need an institution that will support them in these fields.
Second, a person's mental state plays a crucial role in his or her success. For example, if a boy wants a career in acting and his institution discourages him to pursue this career, which he obliges. He joins a software job and works for nine hours a day, which he utterly abhors doing. He may get depressed and start to loathe the institution for not letting him have a life he wanted to have. He will have deep compunction for the rest of his life.
Finally, educational institutions tend to push the students for the careers, which are a trend. But, a person needs to identify what he or she wants to do in life and make a move to pursue that career even if it is less viewed in society compared to others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...a that does not lead them to success. I cant entirely agree with the statement in th...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ement in the prompt for two reasons. At first, the current day and age had bu...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t will support them in these fields. Second, a persons mental state plays a c...
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Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...rt them in these fields. Second, a persons mental state plays a crucial role in hi...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ting him have a life he wanted to have. He will have deep compunction for the rest...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ompunction for the rest of his life. Finally, educational institutions tend t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76385542169 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71579200256 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522891566265 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2872727228 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.375 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04166666667 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206611704796 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631825196768 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734550490841 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137746672253 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488226692401 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.