Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Formal education is a structured medium through which we acquire knowledge of the world's science, arts, philosophy, history. The statement asserts that formal education restricts our minds rather than set them free. It is undeniable fact that, formal education is a kind of mold, which shaped and thus restrains our thinking power and force us to think according to customs, and that is why, I believe formal education restrains our soul and I agree with the statement.
Education is the power through which human mind acquire strength to face the darkness of ignorance. Education enlightens our soul and thus the light of knowledge is bestowed upon us to fight against odds and ignorance. But the problem is that, formal education is a kind of mold, which shapes our mind to think in a certain way and force us to approach towards a problem in a predefined strategy. Thus, our spirits are thwarted and breakthroughs are being more difficult.
If we look at the history, we can see that, when Copernicus presented his heliocentric model, he faced great difficulty from his contemporary erudite persons, who were the staunch supporter of the geocentric model. If Copernicus had not brave enough to go against the formal education of his time, he would not have came out with an idea of heliocentric model at that time. So, thus the contemporaries of Copernicus were of perfect example of formal education which restricted their mind to accept the more logical truth.
Similarly, Abraham Lincoln, the first president of independent America, was not a student of conventional educational system. Because of his own schooling, he introspected his mind, went against the convention of slavery and enacted emancipation law, abandoned slavery from the history of America in the midst of huge opposition from his contemporary politicians and business people.
On the other hand, formal education is necessary as because, without a structured program, a nation can not thrive. With the help of formal education, we can learn the history of mankind and the systematic victory of science through years of diligent effort. We can not deny the fact that, it is necessary to have a conventional system, because it is needless to try all the people of the world to try to be Steve Jobs or Abraham Lincoln. If all the people wants to be the dissenter of conventionality, than there will be no one to do the mundane jobs, to work on the fields, to do the daily works required to rotate the wheel of civilization. Without the staunch supporter of the established truth, the system will collapse, there will be no one to continue the ongoing research based on the previous successful outcome.
So, to conclude, it is needless to say that, formal education retrains our mind and thinking ability. We need people who will go against the conventional system of education to bring the breakthrough, to think in a way which was not cultivated before. But at the same time, formal education is also required to retain the growth of civilization, to continue the work paved by our predecessor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...rough which we acquire knowledge of the worlds science, arts, philosophy, history. The...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...ducation of his time, he would not have came out with an idea of heliocentric model ...
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Line 5, column 504, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...to be the dissenter of conventionality, than there will be no one to do the mundane ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'similarly', 'so', 'thus', 'kind of', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233856893543 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.157068062827 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0855148342059 0.0880659088768 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0314136125654 0.0497285424764 63% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0593368237347 0.0444667217837 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120418848168 0.12292977631 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0261780104712 0.0406280797675 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89644288195 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0418848167539 0.030933414821 135% => OK
Particles: 0.00174520069808 0.0016655270985 105% => OK
Determiners: 0.0994764397906 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0157068062827 0.0249443105267 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174520069808 0.0148568991511 117% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3070.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 514.0 452.878318584 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97276264591 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356031128405 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295719844358 0.280924506359 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204280155642 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.145914396887 0.132149295362 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89644288195 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 219.290929204 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474708171206 0.48968727796 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.3610918927 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.7 23.380412469 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6979627349 59.4972553346 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.5 141.124799967 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 23.380412469 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 55.2719844358 51.4728631049 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.53521126761 1.64882698954 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368903404949 0.391690518653 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.133991756142 0.123202303941 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0960363157562 0.077325440228 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.628397819019 0.547984918172 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144806204176 0.149214159877 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170106319145 0.161403998019 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672396402336 0.0892212321368 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.419131263252 0.385218514788 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.116027423414 0.0692045440612 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255239142851 0.275328986314 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826920431671 0.0653680567796 127% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.