Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
In the Oscar winning movie - "The Beautiful Mind" - actor Russels Crawe has been featured as John Nash, a Nobel laureate in economics (1994). In the movie, we can see Russels (Nash in the film) quoting that "classroom education ruins one's mind". Now, how do we examine this statement? While many critics might support this quotation in more extreme sense without getting further background information, yet its not rational to do so. As far as I am concerned, I adhere to the notion that formal education enhance our mind, and its abilities, so that it ministers to set them free.
Those critics - who support that formal education ruins one's mind- prefer to give example of Einstein as well. Although the sources are not reliable, yet I have seen few people in internet believing that Einstein once said university education restrains one's mind. However, in my opinion, the context in which they (Nash and Einstein) said so might be different and today we don't consider the thorough context and remember the only the single sentence. Before giving the reference of these two great scholars, we should not forget that they loved teaching at university, they loved to teach people. If they had really said so, they had not shown interest in teaching at university. The fact, in my opinion, may be they believed universities and their education are the ultimate key to set free one's mind; however, they might have cautioned us that wrong way of teaching-and-learning really ruins students' mind.
Now lets consider the another aspect of the argument that I adhere to: formal education sets our minds free. Education is the key to enlighten our mind. Take myself for example. After joining formal education, today, I have knowledge at large: I have knowledge of different realm which makes me different from an uneducated, ignorant person. I understand the way people want to live, I understand people and their culture, and many more. Unlike an uneducated person, I can describe something in a novel way. Once, for example, my uneducated friend was beating his cow, for the cow was not milking. I witnessed the befalling. Then it is important to know what I did. I suggested him to call a veterinary doctor. Fortunately, he didn't deny my words and did what I had advised. Finally, a veterinary doctor cured the cow which started milking after the treatment. This is an evidence what formal education can do. Unlike an uneducated, an educated person can understand the hardship of other creatures as well - like I understood what might have happened with the cow and recommended to call doctor.
Likewise, one's attitude is vital for professional success. Can't we notice any difference in attitude between CEO of a company and the his clerk? Of course, there would be some obvious differences. And the root of the differences would be correlated with the differences in formal education. As a result, a formally educated person can chair in the leading position and strive to bring change in the society.
Therefore at the end of the day, I believe that formal education makes people open-minded: it sets one's spirit free and allow it to fly high in the sky. The arguments and hard fact examples presented above are to shore up my position.
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'of course', 'as a result', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220634920635 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.173015873016 0.157235817809 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0777777777778 0.0880659088768 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0492063492063 0.0497285424764 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0809523809524 0.0444667217837 182% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0968253968254 0.12292977631 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0365079365079 0.0406280797675 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79242422598 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238095238095 0.030933414821 77% => OK
Particles: 0.0015873015873 0.0016655270985 95% => OK
Determiners: 0.084126984127 0.0997080785238 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0206349206349 0.0249443105267 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015873015873 0.0148568991511 107% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3269.0 2732.02544248 120% => OK
No of words: 550.0 452.878318584 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94363636364 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.343636363636 0.366273622748 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.274545454545 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210909090909 0.200843997647 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132727272727 0.132149295362 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79242422598 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 219.290929204 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536363636364 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 67.0199331374 55.4138127331 121% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6194690265 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.1875 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7381855475 59.4972553346 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.15625 141.124799967 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.46875 0.674092028746 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.21349557522 288% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 44.6420454545 51.4728631049 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.16753926702 1.64882698954 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180055307189 0.391690518653 46% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110858479488 0.123202303941 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.112732514091 0.077325440228 146% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.410518324308 0.547984918172 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16908471686 0.149214159877 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601551448294 0.161403998019 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669946822837 0.0892212321368 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328347664771 0.385218514788 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0116105014011 0.0692045440612 17% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123656438854 0.275328986314 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279786555199 0.0653680567796 43% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.5995575221 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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