The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals

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The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Some critics argue that nowadays the luxuries and conveniences of modern life are hindering people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. They, however, really see one aspect of something. In reality, without the creations and inventions of the strong, independent individuals, how would we have lived so much pleasurable environment? This does not deny that some people indeed abandon themselves in current luxuries and conveniences of life, but they are only the small fraction of our society, and I believe that today's convenient life will make individuals stronger and more independent rather than weaker and more reliant in the context of the ever-increasing competitiveness and globalization.

Exactly as critics are worried, healthy problem has become more and more looming because modern people enjoy a large range of luxurious and convenient life that advanced technologies bring about. In physically, such diseases as diabetes, cancers, tumors, obesity have been the top four killers of health, the cause of which is because convenient life makes people vulnerable——cars take the place of walking, snacks or exquisite foodstuffs substitute coarse grains, abundant vegetables and fruits are planted with pesticides, fertilizers, hormones, in short, this kind of lifestyle is increasingly eroding people's health. In mentally, some people suffer from anxiety, disorder, for housing, cars, and the luxuries are compressing the development of their spirit. People struggle for simply enjoying higher physical necessities and exert heavier pressure on themselves, resulting in insomnia, disorder, even schizophrenia, which is really a serious problem for today's people.

Conscious of the seriousness of these problems produced by the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life, the governments, together with professors from different fields, publish these hazards, and suggest how people should improve their body constitution. Balanced-nutritious foods produced by modern technologies are available, advanced sport facilities and excise videos are ubiquitous, wearable devices warn people about their health situation. All these means will help people develop healthier and stronger individuals.

Modern technologies have made it possible for people to realize all-round development, being a real independent, free individual. First, abundant materials are enough for people to turn from their basic necessities, even higher-level standard of physical life, to pursue for their career, from one occupation or one place to another, a process of searching for themselves. Particularly, internet expand people's conception of time and space, not confined within specific place and group, in which everyone, as an independent individual, connects with others in the globe. Second, with the aid of diverse electric tools of learning, people from child to adult begin self-study, self-judgment, self-analysis, self-decision. For instance, BBK learning machine (an electric device for automatic learning) are installed and instantly updated with plentiful learning materials for students from preliminary phase to high school to study at any time anywhere, with the passing time they accumulate more and more knowledge and gradually cultivate their own means of learning and problem-solution, strengthened by the guidance of teachers and by school-developed teaching tools including classes of training creativity. Afterwards entering into university, they must independently finish their thesis mainly by extensively searching, reading, sifting internet materials at home and abroad, a process of deeply cultivating critical, creative thinking. Then they become more mature in dealing with interpersonal relation, overcoming difficulties of work and life, partly due to the help of information technology that can supply the solution on any subject. In old age, people can find a lot of entertainments and sports to spend their time, less dependent on their offspring.

All in all, by properly taking advantage of the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life, people will develop more perfect individuals.

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Average: 8.1 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...re enough for people to turn from their basic necessities, even higher-level standard of physical...
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Line 7, column 749, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to machine'
Suggestion: to machine
...lf-decision. For instance, BBK learning machine an electric device for automatic learni...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, second, so, then, for instance, in short, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3560.0 2235.4752809 159% => OK
No of words: 599.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94323873122 5.05705443957 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2386348367 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 346.0 215.323595506 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577629382304 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 1086.3 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => OK
Sentence length SD: 107.277805253 60.3974514979 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.0 118.986275619 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.95 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366858479313 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119537326628 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131821481065 0.0758088955206 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24663956286 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104404016191 0.0667264976115 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 14.1392134831 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 48.8420337079 51% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.76 12.1639044944 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.51 8.38706741573 125% => OK
difficult_words: 206.0 100.480337079 205% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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