A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how those examples shape your position.
It is stated that students should be urged to study the same courses until entering universities. The suggestion may be merit for equal education purpose, however, this policy ignores the situations that not all the younglings are able to be imparted with the same knowledge. To say that students should study the same national curriculum is therefore not recommended.
It is expected that there are some gifted youngsters who have high intelligence quotient or outstanding performance at sports. They need to be cared accordingly in order to maintain and polish their special abilities, otherwise they will be rusted in class and give no contribution to the realms they are good at. The United States’ education system, for example, has already implemented this policy to most of their teenagers before enrolling to universities, including scholarships for talented football players, basketball athletes or the participants who have won a prize in the International Mathematical Olympiad, so that they can go to higher education successfully in spite of the circumstances of being poor.
On the other hand, students who suffer mental or physical disorders cannot be imparted with the same curriculum as normal students. They may have certain disabilities, such as blindness or retarded, so that they need additional help to reduce their difficulties in studies. For instance, Albert Einstein was thought to be a retard when he was in elementary school. Without his teachers and parents’ patients and special care, it is unbelievable to imagine that ha became one of the greatest scientists in twentieth centuries. As a result, it is not appropriate to teach the same materials for all students if they are not having the same physical or psychological conditions.
By contrast, if consistent curriculum are provided to all teenagers, negative impacts are consequently generated. Those students with gifted or defected abilities will not have the appropriate training, resulting them to become ordinary, or even cannot graduate from elementary school. Even worse, some of them may become gangsters to sell drugs because of low education and poverty. Imagine what could happen if Albert Einstein did not receive suitable education, despite his psychological issues while he was young? Consequently, they cannot have positive contributions to the societies.
Owing to the negative impacts by following this suggestion and the promising result by objecting this policy, it is therefore not recommended that all the teenagers should be imparted by the same national courses.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The suggestion may be merit for equal education purpose, however, this policy ignores the situations that not all the younglings are able to be imparted with the same knowledge.
Error: younglings Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2126 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.315 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.988 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.035 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'but', 'consequently', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in spite of', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216517857143 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.169642857143 0.157235817809 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111607142857 0.0880659088768 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.046875 0.0497285424764 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0491071428571 0.0444667217837 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113839285714 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0558035714286 0.0406280797675 137% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.11635905345 2.79330140395 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0401785714286 0.030933414821 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.078125 0.0997080785238 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0290178571429 0.0249443105267 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0111607142857 0.0148568991511 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2588.0 2732.02544248 95% => OK
No of words: 400.0 452.878318584 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.47 6.0361032391 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.425 0.366273622748 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.3425 0.280924506359 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.29 0.200843997647 144% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.195 0.132149295362 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11635905345 2.79330140395 112% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 219.290929204 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545 0.48968727796 111% => OK
Word variations: 62.089985505 55.4138127331 112% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5294117647 23.380412469 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.64351264 59.4972553346 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.235294118 141.124799967 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5294117647 23.380412469 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.882352941176 0.674092028746 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.21349557522 0% => OK
Readability: 57.7794117647 51.4728631049 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.45378151261 1.64882698954 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418749266567 0.391690518653 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0821327172148 0.123202303941 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0541374709997 0.077325440228 70% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527227208192 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.185270811976 0.149214159877 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16732291807 0.161403998019 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939326911106 0.0892212321368 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.293925246394 0.385218514788 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0814831093014 0.0692045440612 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285875315754 0.275328986314 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598829451771 0.0653680567796 92% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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