People’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
It is debatable whether people’s thoughts and demeanors are impacted more by current milieu or society as a whole. Imminent situations do have some influence on people’s attitudes; however, it is society as a whole that shapes people on a long term.
To begin with, immediate surroundings can have a huge impact if the situation itself affects numerous people. Due to the sudden change, people’s stances can change rapidly. Fukushima accident cogently shows how immediate surrounding can engender drastic transformation in people’s attitudes. There was a serious radioactive water leakage due to high magnitude of earthquake and tsunami in Japan. The leakage is very harmful, almost lethal to living creatures including humans. After this incident, plane tickets and hotel fees for tourists have radically dropped since a lot of people refuse to visit Japan because of the potential harm on their body. Japan used to be one of the most popular nations among tourists, but now, its heyday has passed due to the nuclear accident; the country became much less attractive to people now compared to the past.
Nonetheless, society as a whole is still a crucial factor in determining people’s thoughts. People’s thoughts and stances vary as the society go through different phases and changes. For example, youtubers’ status has increased incredibly over the past several decades; the job was once not even considered as a real job, but because the society transformed steadily and continuously, demands on internet and Youtube as a platform for video creators have increased. People consider the career more seriously than before. Another example is attitudes toward LGBT community. After the law passed regarding same sex marriage in the United States, it yielded a huge impact worldwide. Although it seems like recent situations have brought changes, it is not; both instances, especially same sex marriage was issues of societies for a long time, and after slow and gradual process, both incidents happened and people’s attitudes changed even from before. Thus, society as whole rather than immediate situations mold people’s thought process.
All in all, even though imminent surroundings can sometimes drastically transform and impact people’s attitudes, it is prolonged societal issues and features that shape people’s thoughts and behaviors on the long term.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1947 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.276 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.674 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.147 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ole that shapes people on a long term. To begin with, immediate surroundings ca...
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Line 7, column 47, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'can'.
Suggestion: sometimes can
... all, even though imminent surroundings can sometimes drastically transform and impact people...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'for example', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.280353200883 0.240241500013 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.116997792494 0.157235817809 74% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0993377483444 0.0880659088768 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.075055187638 0.0497285424764 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0198675496689 0.0444667217837 45% => OK
Prepositions: 0.103752759382 0.12292977631 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0264900662252 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01652190139 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0198675496689 0.030933414821 64% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0772626931567 0.0997080785238 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00883002207506 0.0249443105267 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00441501103753 0.0148568991511 30% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2427.0 2732.02544248 89% => OK
No of words: 369.0 452.878318584 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.57723577236 6.0361032391 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.466124661247 0.366273622748 127% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.376693766938 0.280924506359 134% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.262872628726 0.200843997647 131% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.176151761518 0.132149295362 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01652190139 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 219.290929204 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612466124661 0.48968727796 125% => OK
Word variations: 74.1791562541 55.4138127331 134% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2552088338 59.4972553346 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 141.124799967 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.674092028746 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 58.1693766938 51.4728631049 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.9375 1.64882698954 118% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276247102545 0.391690518653 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0918522954359 0.123202303941 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0659665264024 0.077325440228 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484173152855 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.20329090401 0.149214159877 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110009966923 0.161403998019 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987309533798 0.0892212321368 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.242313143269 0.385218514788 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0975242704977 0.0692045440612 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191397811026 0.275328986314 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103464601124 0.0653680567796 158% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.5995575221 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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