People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

How can a person decide how to behave in public? Should they behave to please themselves? Or should they behave to please others? It is widely observed that a person’s behavior is highly characterized by the people around him. It depends on the thought that what will people think of them if they behave in a particular manner and it is very slightly based on their own wish or liking. Thus, I would totally agree with the author’s claim.

A person’s behavior should always be punctilious but in doing so he or she should not be faking it just to please other people. A very common example of this can be seen in schools and colleges. Many students just to be a part of a so called cool group of other students try to behave like them even if they are uncomfortable in doing so. They start faking their accent, start treating their teachers with disrespect just because other students think that is cool. By doing so, they are only putting their reputation in jeopardy. Hence, parents should make sure that their child is not the one suffering from this and teachers should keep an eye on students so that they don’t take any wrong step.

While in some cases even if people’s behavior is influenced by the masses it is justified. Consider an employee who has gone for a very big event and is surrounded by great achievers of his same field. Here the employee’s behavior can be characterized by the people around him because there is opportunity for him getting promoted or even getting a better job. The employee will try and behave just like others so that everyone thinks that he is one of their kind and this will result in having a good first impression of him on others.

Thus, a person’s behavior should not be determined by the masses. He should be firm in making the decision without thinking how other people will think about it. But sometimes and only sometimes following a herd of sheep is also important.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...n’s behavior is highly characterized by the people around him. It depends on the thought that what wi...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...otally agree with the author’s claim. A person’s behavior should always be pun...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...getting a better job. The employee will try and behave just like others so that everyon...
^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'in some cases']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.157608695652 0.240241500013 66% => OK
Verbs: 0.190217391304 0.157235817809 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0815217391304 0.0880659088768 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0815217391304 0.0497285424764 164% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0869565217391 0.0444667217837 196% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.138586956522 0.12292977631 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0625 0.0406280797675 154% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52097743026 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0163043478261 0.030933414821 53% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0815217391304 0.0997080785238 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0434782608696 0.0249443105267 174% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0135869565217 0.0148568991511 91% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1944.0 2732.02544248 71% => OK
No of words: 344.0 452.878318584 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6511627907 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.325581395349 0.366273622748 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.200581395349 0.280924506359 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.142441860465 0.200843997647 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0813953488372 0.132149295362 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52097743026 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 219.290929204 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494186046512 0.48968727796 101% => OK
Word variations: 51.263010103 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.1052631579 23.380412469 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0416574396 59.4972553346 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.315789474 141.124799967 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 23.380412469 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.473684210526 0.674092028746 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 38.1634026928 51.4728631049 74% => OK
Elegance: 1.0 1.64882698954 61% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224808036752 0.391690518653 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118006774078 0.123202303941 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.143232240359 0.077325440228 185% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.458454499399 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.101121295642 0.149214159877 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797627959634 0.161403998019 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599643985347 0.0892212321368 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281928668659 0.385218514788 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0321691817401 0.0692045440612 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156999671213 0.275328986314 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292948823792 0.0653680567796 45% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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