People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
In this era of remarkable sophistication and versatility, a prevailing acceptance lies that people's behavior is determined by forces rather than themselves. In contrast, I am on the opposite side of this claim and assert that people can make them own choice about them behavior even if they are forced to preform in some way. To examine my standpoint, further details will be looked into as below.
To begin with, it should be under scored that it is possible to avoid this power which forced people to behavior in particular ways. Specifically, there is no need to stay in such situation which people can not make their own choice. For instance, working in a big company sometime means a steady income which also have to obey complex rules. In this case, the rules might limited people's desire and restrict their behaviors. In order to avoid this power, people can make their decision to change another job which contains few limitations. Even though one have to remain in this condition, the choice is always there and the problem of stay or leave is controlled by themselves.
What's more, never should we forget that people also have their own power to against the force which controlled their behavior. That is to say, if people is forced by others for a long time, they might try to against it for their rights. Furthermore, there are plenty of evidences in the history that people under the pressure of tyranny eventually end up in a revolt. Taking Nero, one of the emperor of ancient Roma, who was overthrown by his citizen because of his arbitrary attitude toward the policy and the strict limitation to people. Hence, people can fight for their right to behave what they want.
Admittedly, to some extent, people have to behave themselves which might object to their favor. To be more accurate, there also have some rules that people have to follow. Additionally, if people violate these regulations it will cause a large chaos in the society. For example, it will be much more dangerous if people do not obey the traffic rules and drive at a speed as what they want. Thus it is obvious that people's behavior is limited by forces rather than themselves.
To put it in a nutshell, it is sagacious to support the claim that people's behavior will not determined by force and can make their own choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, thus, for example, for instance, in contrast, in particular, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77114427861 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52400666369 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490049751244 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7260068997 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.9 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358777786424 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118931729283 0.0831039109588 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952226700487 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239754943508 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622679564346 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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