People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

"A person is made of the environment around him". The statement is undebatable when we relate a persons nature and behaviour to milieu around him, a person brought up in an artistic milieu is likely to be more creative than a person who is brought up in a family of bankers. A person is nothing but an accumulation of several experiences over the span of lifetime, which are affected by forces not of their own making but several other external factors.

In several countries in the world, there is a different juvenile detention centre for people who haven't yet become the adults. If a person who hasn't yet reached the age of legal maturity is staged at the same place where gangs of robbers and rapists are placed, the young mind will be subjected to such an environment which will most likely affect the person he becomes once he grows up. The governments of these countries realise that the future generation should be raised in an environment which does not hamper the morals of the person they would become.

In offices, people who are participating in the human version of the rats race, try to act sweet in front of the bosses and cajole them for promotions. Humans act chivalrous in order to impress others. There is a very famous saying which states "People buy materials they don't like, to impress people they don't know, with the money they don't have". Such a saying is a validation of the human behaviour which tells how a person tries to appease another person in one form or the other.

The Almighty Dalai Lama quotes that "Nobody in the world wants to suffer and everybody wants happiness". By saying this Almighty does not only state about the happiness of the person, but clearly states that even a criminal is a person who does not want to suffer himself/herself and his/her past actions are a consequence of what the person would've gone through, the environment he was placed in at the time of crime. Dalai Lama acknowledges the very well implicit fact of life that a persons behaviour is subjected to the external factors around ones life.

While the people who oppose the statement could say, that every person after reaching a certain age is grown up enough to act in a way independent of others. Such a proposition would just compose of small fraction of the people in today's world. The statement claims that a persons behaviour is determined by external forces, everyone in the world has to behave in a particular way according to the culture, or the legal laws or society around. While certain part of the population might be uninfluenced by the forces around them, a person in today's life cannot lead a life completely unaffected by external factors.

It might be true that several decisions and behaviour in ones life remain independent of external factors, a person does stay affected by the external surroundings. Can an Aboriginal Australian still continue to hunt an animal anywhere he sees? Can the villagers in India still burn widows in the village as a part of the cultural practice? To conclude, it is important to state that while several decisions in a person life are based out of logic and love, a person is not truly independent of decision making influenced by external factors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...atement is undebatable when we relate a persons nature and behaviour to milieu around h...
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Suggestion: haven't
...uvenile detention centre for people who havent yet become the adults. If a person who ...
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Suggestion: hasn't
... yet become the adults. If a person who hasnt yet reached the age of legal maturity i...
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Suggestion: don't
... states 'People buy materials they dont like, to impress people they dont know,...
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Suggestion: don't
... they dont like, to impress people they dont know, with the money they dont have&apo...
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Suggestion: don't
...ple they dont know, with the money they dont have'. Such a saying is a validati...
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Suggestion: would've
...ns are a consequence of what the person wouldve gone through, the environment he was pl...
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... very well implicit fact of life that a persons behaviour is subjected to the external ...
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...days world. The statement claims that a persons behaviour is determined by external for...
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Line 9, column 507, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding forces'?
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...the population might be uninfluenced by the forces around them, a person in todays life cannot lead a ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'as to']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244336569579 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.169902912621 0.157235817809 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0760517799353 0.0880659088768 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0404530744337 0.0497285424764 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0291262135922 0.0444667217837 66% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12783171521 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0388349514563 0.0406280797675 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71469610765 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0258899676375 0.030933414821 84% => OK
Particles: 0.00485436893204 0.0016655270985 291% => OK
Determiners: 0.126213592233 0.0997080785238 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0177993527508 0.0249443105267 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0258899676375 0.0148568991511 174% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3263.0 2732.02544248 119% => OK
No of words: 561.0 452.878318584 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81639928699 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365418894831 0.366273622748 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.235294117647 0.280924506359 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163992869875 0.200843997647 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106951871658 0.132149295362 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71469610765 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 219.290929204 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472370766488 0.48968727796 96% => OK
Word variations: 56.5269318633 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.7142857143 23.380412469 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1493568442 59.4972553346 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.380952381 141.124799967 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 23.380412469 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 0.674092028746 49% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.21349557522 211% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.243697479 51.4728631049 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.71621621622 1.64882698954 104% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410391984089 0.391690518653 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11487245038 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0664022803659 0.077325440228 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.58890645991 0.547984918172 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128565099403 0.149214159877 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180349978663 0.161403998019 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638414090606 0.0892212321368 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.427995828935 0.385218514788 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0338526989095 0.0692045440612 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286561851274 0.275328986314 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336906001046 0.0653680567796 52% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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