People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author of the issue highlights that behavior of people is influenced by forces that may not be under their control rather than make a decision by their own free will. Due to the controversial nature of this question there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that people all around the globe regardless of their age are mature enough to make a sound decision and behave properly. In the ensuing paragraphs some convincing reasons will be delineated to elaborate my personal stance.
By and large it is established beyond doubt that external elements might influence people's behavior because some people are on the conviction that manner and behavior is affected by surrounding areas. Broadly speaking, although it might seem tenable at face, people have an ability to think wisely especially when they face trials and tribulations in their everyday life. As a matter of fact, personality is affected by happening and people mature when they cope with such situations. Indeed, there are vast majorities of rules, laws, regulations and so forth in every given society but it depends on people whether abide with those rules or not. To elucidate more on this issue, hardly ever can people behave appropriately if external elements take the control of the people owing to the fact that those element might come in different forms and shapes. That being so, it will temporarily bring deleterious effects on the manner of people. As a tangible example, when students start their education it is incumbent upon them to carry out their projects, papers, assignments and so forth. If external elements impact on their study, they will not be successful. In fact, they should be responsible and behave by their own willing, in a way that no one and nothing could take the control of their education.
Another reason that cannot go unnoticed is that individual responsibility play a pivotal role in behavior of people. To put it in general word, people may got confused at first glance against their responsibility and their behavior. Actually, it is individuals that determine how to behave due to the fact that there is a correlation between individual responsibility and behavior. Take for instance, when people are sitting behind their steering wheel, their car become the extension of their personality. In fact, it's their duty to respect rules and laws and in this way, behavior is determined by people. Going into the depth, individual responsibility provide an opportunity for people to behave properly and take the control of situation and make their own decisions.
However, what was alluded to above can't be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable benefits it has, indisputably, many people are not able to behave properly by their own making. Arguably, external components and surrounding areas can provide fertile ground for people to learn how to behave. As far as I am concerned, there are especial situation such as fighting, which people could not take their control and external forces play a key role in those circumstances. As a corollary, it is true that to an extent that behavior of people is affected by forces that may not be under their control.
In light of the reasons elaborated, I reiterate that behavior of people is greatly depend on their own free will or even outer forces. Actually, people are mature enough to identify what is true or what is not. So, they can think wisely and their behavior is controlled by themselves. In addition, individual responsibility play an important role in behavior of people because when they take the responsibility of their acts, indeed, they take the control of their behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this element' or 'those elements'?
Suggestion: this element; those elements
...ol of the people owing to the fact that those element might come in different forms and shape...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...xtension of their personality. In fact, its their duty to respect rules and laws an...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... However, what was alluded to above cant be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alo...
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Line 7, column 363, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'situations'?
Suggestion: situations
...r as I am concerned, there are especial situation such as fighting, which people could no...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hey take the control of their behavior.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'broadly speaking', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'by and large', 'it is true', 'to a great extent']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219941348974 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.155425219941 0.157235817809 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0791788856305 0.0880659088768 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.058651026393 0.0497285424764 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0674486803519 0.0444667217837 152% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.134897360704 0.12292977631 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0307917888563 0.0406280797675 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82718979941 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0293255131965 0.030933414821 95% => OK
Particles: 0.00146627565982 0.0016655270985 88% => OK
Determiners: 0.0718475073314 0.0997080785238 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0263929618768 0.0249443105267 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0219941348974 0.0148568991511 148% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3733.0 2732.02544248 137% => OK
No of words: 617.0 452.878318584 136% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05024311183 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98392262146 4.58838876751 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.369529983793 0.366273622748 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267423014587 0.280924506359 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194489465154 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128038897893 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82718979941 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 219.290929204 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444084278768 0.48968727796 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.0011095248 55.4138127331 97% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0357142857 23.380412469 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2835064315 59.4972553346 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.321428571 141.124799967 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0357142857 23.380412469 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.607142857143 0.674092028746 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 48.7780157444 51.4728631049 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.36979166667 1.64882698954 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406464153672 0.391690518653 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0923462435782 0.123202303941 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0488156189191 0.077325440228 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478778284901 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.106293565998 0.149214159877 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153171406456 0.161403998019 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639988354924 0.0892212321368 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.434692545632 0.385218514788 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0682935322859 0.0692045440612 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303816554552 0.275328986314 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251316731152 0.0653680567796 38% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.5995575221 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.