People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The issue of whether the people’s behavior is affected by the external forces not by their own making is a contentious one. Whilst each side of the claim has its proponent and opponent, I deem that the role of forces and environment is something inevitable that could shape the behavior of people, because there are many elements, such as mass media, education and cultural values that could influence on the people’s choices, preferences and also behviour.
To begin with, having a brief look at the international statistics we can see that in the recent century the number of educated people surged. Education itself could shape the people’s mind and hence their behavior. A biased education could rein people to think and behave in a particular way apart from whether this bias is plausible or not. For instance, in the middle of 20th century there were some Economics school in US that were just teaching a certain school of taught. An student who inadvertently went to the MIT, for example, would be directed to think as the Neoclassical Economists or one who went to Chicago would be directed in the way a Monetarist think.
The other force that could largely influence on the behavior of the people is the role of mass media in the society. A recent questionnaire showed that majority of the people in the world spend an average of 4 hours for watching TV and about 6-7 hours spending on the others like surfing the internet or social networks. These forces could easily shape the fashion in the society and hence change the behavior of the people. Consider a popular TV channel whose programs are in support of a certain clothing vogue, this popularity could affect on the people’s preferences about their raiment. An other example could be a mass media who tries to teach some certain value to improve the health care in the society by making programs and activities for how people take care of their health or how to treat with their disease. These signlas implicitly would also be an element shaping the people’s behavior.
Furthermore, nations curtural background could be an external force who gradually influence the behavior from childhood. An Islamic nation’s value about drinking may be a force to preclude the society’s behavior towards alchoholic products.
Nonetheles, some could argue that people could not definitely tie themselves to the directed forces. There are some examples like revolutions in the history that people went against the forces in their era. This point is flawed, since the word “behavior” somehow integral the whole societies behavior not only one person and this implies that there should something like waves in the society to direct people towards them.
In conclusion, however, the people’s bahavior is largely influenced by many externatlities affecting them such as cultures, education and mass media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: A
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Suggestion: Another
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, look, may, so, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03933747412 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60711773239 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7152338009 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.105263158 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165695422395 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654454764077 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374700416486 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0966653886453 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272665197941 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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