Forces could be devided into a variety of catogories. Forces firstly could be violence by our parents, and secondly could be the political puissance of the government legistic regulations, and thirdly could be our surrrending environments and so on. In a nutshell, folks live in shaping forces and their behaviors are very much likely to be determined by them. However, individuals' invisible motivation is storng-- as the famous word explicts: what decides us is not where we are but who we are. Our own making, in other words, our potential strength could defeat the adversity caused by tremendous forces from outside. Thus I totally do not agree with the statement.
To begin with, after knowing the circumanstance folks are in, some will be negatively pushed and shaped by their fates. But lots of them will resist and fight all the way out. As we know the slavery is quite severe in the 17th, and thank to struggling of the liberities and great celebrities, the slavery was abolished. Those who suffer in slavery, some of which, must have joined the parades and arguing activities to gain their liberty. Their behavior is determined by their own willing of fighting unfair constitutional legistic social reality, not the compromise to the forces.
Adversities could be obstacles which devide people into successful and unsuccessful ones in one's path. The hurricane of fate is overbearing, yet the individuals' strength could defeat it. Those who are full of stamina in a while might not make it to the end, but those who keep their faith and stick to their hard-working could. Although becoming deaf after age 30, Beethoven the greatest musicians of the world did not stop making orchestra. In his perspective the adversities, in an other word, outside force made who he was. The 6th symphony in the first paragraph applies simple tone by piano too intimate the destorying fate, and then the twisted yet solid music played by vilion shows his undefeatable will. The fate did not make Beethoven surrender. It was his own making keeping him forward.
Facing violences, the ultimate and brustal way of force, is terrfic. Yet peoples' behavior will not change. In last centery folks on the streets in the capital of Columbia paradises to protest their decay government and their prisendent. The government behavee like coward since even some police force also joined the parade. And goverment sent their military running dog to stop and even slauter people. But parades growed stronger and finally destroyed the government and select their own president which is the first femal democracy president in the history.
To conclude, our own making instead of forces, makes individuals independent and decides our behaviors. Eagerness to liberty, unbending to fate and yearning to democracy for instances, are all significent motivitions produced by our heart. And those fantastic characteristics in stead of our appearance, state , or race makes us who we are.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...used by tremendous forces from outside. Thus I totally do not agree with the stateme...
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Suggestion: one's
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Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...rricane of fate is overbearing, yet the individuals strength could defeat it. Those who are...
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Suggestion: another
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Suggestion:
... prisendent. The government behavee like coward since even some police force also...
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Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...istics in stead of our appearance, state , or race makes us who we are.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, while, even so, for instance, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12396694215 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79156831383 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559917355372 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.77640449438 676% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7068241859 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5714285714 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130937552534 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366839293611 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370008045717 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720152146528 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308708643384 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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