People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

There are many measures which determine how people are behaving, one of them is influencing forces around them. Majority of hoi-polloai people react according to their surrounding environment, which moldes their behavior. For example, elections, education, what people think of other nation's people, and culture are majorly impacted by forces around them.

The elections in any country are considered as independent and educated decision of every person, especially in democratic countries, but it is really happening or it is true for every citizen of the country is questionable. Recent elections, in US demostrated this. The president Donald Trump, had no chances of win before elections result announced, but all of sudden what made him win is a big question in front of whole country. One of the major reason considered is how he invoked different feeling in people, for example, racial discrimination about muslim countries, or immigrants taking away all the jobs, thats why country's graduates are not getting jobs. Many people feel they are effected by one or the other reason, which might have been a cause of his win.

Culture is another example, which is vastly effected by forces, rather than people's own making. For example, in India many emporers came from other countries and ruled. All tried force their culture on people, and thats how they ended up following forced culture instead of their own, and slowly it got blended in their own culture.

If we consider education system, according to statistics 30 out 100 students know what is their passion and only 5 ended up following what their heart says, many time rest of them get effected by their surroundings and what kind of trend is going on or which field has more job oppurtunities.

On the other hand, their are people who doesn't get influenced by forces around them and make their own way, but those people are very less. For example, astronut Kalpna Chawla. She chose aerospace carrier when girls not in this profession. She succeded in the field and set example for others.

Thus, in conclusion, no doubt people use their own instincs to determine their behavior, but if we talk about common people, which are majority, it is hard to say their behavior is untouched by the surrounding forces.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05835543767 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63821607495 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562334217507 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1723715217 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.176470588 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208109470454 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07039780711 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549182064643 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12217833048 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468038322677 0.0667264976115 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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