The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
When it comes to the issue the main aim of technologies, some people think that modern equipment just to help us to have more time for leisure. However, others have the different view. As far as I am concerned, each of these sides has strengths and weakness. Despite this fact, I think that the primary goal of technology can be preserving human life or increasing people’s welfare.
To illustrate my position, let us to take a look on why people think that technologies assist us to have more time for recreation. In the modern age, people can do many things in the short by new technologies. Hence, state-of-the-art tools increase their performance as well as they can have more spare time. In this way, technologies like robotics, fast transportation,
Although, I admit that one of the aims of new technology can increase our free time, I believe we can mention the other most important proposes for them. There is a famous sentence that “necessity is mother of innovation." Definition of necessity can be different for any age. Sometime human feel to need new technologies for prospering economic condition, so that they design and innovate modern transportation that they not only are fast, but also can carry more weight.
A further point we must consider is that human makes some technologies for preserving their survival. I think that a small example can give some light to this matter. Nowadays, water pollution issue is a trouble crisis for all countries around the world. All governments know sooner or later; they will face with the lack of water, which will menace human survival. You may do not believe it, but experts are sure that the future wars will be imitated because of water. Thus scientists try to make a special tool that allows them to transform air to water. Therefore, human create some tools for the most important aim than leisure.
All above evidence supports this fact that there are various aims of technology such as safeguarding human life, boosting economic condition. As a result, we never can consider the one reason for technological advancements, because in-state-the-art equipment has an obligation to help human to all areas not in a certain filed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gies like robotics, fast transportation, Although, I admit that one of the aims o...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fast, but also can carry more weight. A further point we must consider is that...
^^^
Line 6, column 471, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...wars will be imitated because of water. Thus scientists try to make a special tool t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the most important aim than leisure. All above evidence supports this fact th...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'i think', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228571428571 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.147619047619 0.157235817809 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104761904762 0.0880659088768 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0428571428571 0.0497285424764 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0571428571429 0.0444667217837 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119047619048 0.12292977631 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0190476190476 0.0406280797675 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.99714050113 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309523809524 0.030933414821 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0880952380952 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0333333333333 0.0249443105267 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00952380952381 0.0148568991511 64% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2223.0 2732.02544248 81% => OK
No of words: 369.0 452.878318584 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0243902439 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308943089431 0.366273622748 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.235772357724 0.280924506359 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189701897019 0.200843997647 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140921409214 0.132149295362 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99714050113 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 219.290929204 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569105691057 0.48968727796 116% => OK
Word variations: 64.8906539544 55.4138127331 117% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.4210526316 23.380412469 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0426756156 59.4972553346 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 141.124799967 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 23.380412469 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.674092028746 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 42.9982884039 51.4728631049 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.48076923077 1.64882698954 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376865650284 0.391690518653 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0673922302957 0.123202303941 55% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0471590599342 0.077325440228 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.461715987234 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119597465359 0.149214159877 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121453523943 0.161403998019 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750036229084 0.0892212321368 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.298930212143 0.385218514788 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.054570196501 0.0692045440612 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232025874634 0.275328986314 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876597811719 0.0653680567796 134% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.