The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology is irrefutably a boon for our society. Its true that technology has shaped our life completely for good and one cannot deny the benefits of it. From waking up in the morning on the sound of your cell phone alarm, to make breakfast using microwave, to use a car to reach office and using internet in order to connect with outside world, to watch television for entertainment, all are the examples of technological advancements. No one can imagine their life without using one of these as they merely became an integral part of ourselves.
Albeit, there is no doubt that technology has made our lives easier, and as humans our wantonness never mollifies, we always believe in advancements and promotions of the things in our hands. However, its salubrious for the development of mankind, but if we talk about the primary purpose or goal of technological advancements, then curtailing our time seems to be flagrant option. As the technology advances, so do us and in this process we are crucifying our precious time that should be spend with the people we care about and love. Therefore, if the technology helps us increasing our efficiency, it will be directly proportional to get more leisure time and hence, leads to less intricate life.
Furthermore, even if people get some leisure time due to increased efficiency at their work place, some of them are going to spend time with their gadgets, like; video games, smart phones, instead of going out to get mesmerized by some spectacular views, only because they called themselves a gadget freak and using their technical gadgets is what they consider as leisure time. In contrast to this, one can say that technology is not just making people efficient, but addictive. In addition to this, lets say for instance, people are using their leisure time by visiting some marvelous place, although busy with their whatsapp messages and social networking because they want their friends to know about their where about. In all this process, technological advancements comes into picture like how an individual’s leisure time is also not separated from technology’s traps.
To conclude, while technology is profitable in uplifting people’s efficiency at work and in life, it also plays a major role in letting people get some leisure time out from their monotonous and busy schedules. But leisure time can be define as your time to enjoy with your mates and not let your gadgets to be a part of your free time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y became an integral part of ourselves. Albeit, there is no doubt that technolog...
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Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
...ifying our precious time that should be spend with the people we care about and love....
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to increase' or 'increase'.
Suggestion: to increase; increase
.... Therefore, if the technology helps us increasing our efficiency, it will be directly pro...
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...riends to know about their where about. In all this process, technological advance...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'advancements'' or 'advancement's'?
Suggestion: advancements'; advancement's
...out. In all this process, technological advancements comes into picture like how an individ...
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...rocess, technological advancements comes into picture like how an individual&apos...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'no doubt', 'in contrast to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.23991507431 0.240241500013 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.148619957537 0.157235817809 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0743099787686 0.0880659088768 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0445859872611 0.0497285424764 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0828025477707 0.0444667217837 186% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.133757961783 0.12292977631 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0424628450106 0.0406280797675 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88056541925 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.036093418259 0.030933414821 117% => OK
Particles: 0.00424628450106 0.0016655270985 255% => OK
Determiners: 0.0636942675159 0.0997080785238 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0127388535032 0.0249443105267 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00849256900212 0.0148568991511 57% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2483.0 2732.02544248 91% => OK
No of words: 415.0 452.878318584 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.98313253012 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320481927711 0.366273622748 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248192771084 0.280924506359 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180722891566 0.200843997647 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134939759036 0.132149295362 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88056541925 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539759036145 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 61.8984506905 55.4138127331 112% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6194690265 68% => OK
Sentence length: 29.6428571429 23.380412469 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.6424821889 59.4972553346 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.357142857 141.124799967 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6428571429 23.380412469 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.07142857143 0.674092028746 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 54.4621342513 51.4728631049 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.50769230769 1.64882698954 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378058078251 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126068805943 0.123202303941 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0532020014892 0.077325440228 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.544911281789 0.547984918172 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150759725769 0.149214159877 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152607264788 0.161403998019 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761810954972 0.0892212321368 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.337438141758 0.385218514788 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0813163772641 0.0692045440612 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260112314484 0.275328986314 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440010142526 0.0653680567796 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.