Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented
The purpose of art has been perceived as exploration of human mind and spirit presenting its own value. Such notion has been linked to the consistent lack of financial resources in the field of art, which raised a discussion whether or not government funding of the arts is beneficial. While some people argue that government-led financial assistance would help art to thrive and accessible to the public, others argue that it would only be detrimental for the true value of the arts. In my view, government funding is more beneficial than detrimental for the arts.
Of course, it is undeniable that, in some cases, governmental funding could surely threaten the integrity of the arts, which is the most important value they possess. Some kinds of art do not just focus on beauty, but take a further step to ignite a light over their society by being satirical. Thus, for such arts, relying on the government funding could be deleterious for its purpose—criticizing and ridiculing the powerful. Consider, for example, how freely a satirical play can express its criticism against the government when its most critical financial source is the government. This shows that government funding can surely undermine the vital value of the arts—integrity.
Despite the negative impact of financial resource provided by a government on the arts, we should not overlook the benefits of it. As mentioned in the given statement, government funding can be critical in thriving of the arts. Even though artists do not pursue wealth, they still need money manage their everyday life. Government funding, therefore, could financially support them with their creative work by enabling them to focus on their art projects. This would lead the field of art to flourish with diverse trials of artists without fearing too much about whether or not their arts would sell to the public.
Moreover, it is also possible to increase the accessibility of the arts to the public with proactive financial support of the government. When it comes to rural area lacking basic infrastructure of museums and theatres, it is difficult for the residents to obtain an adequate experiences of any kind of art. In such case, governmental funding could have a huge impact and bring a significant change in the people’s artistic experiences. By providing necessary facilities, the government can enhance the accessibility of the residents to play, exhibition, and concerts. Also, the government may be able to provide a range of art classes for the people living in the rural area. This shows how governmental funding can surely provide the arts to more people.
To sum, despite the threatening impact of governmental funding on the integrity of the arts, it is still necessary. The financial resource provided by the government not only can enable artists to make their ends meet, but also improve the accessibility of the people to the arts, especially in rural area. Thus, I strongly believe that governmental funding has more positive impact than negative.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Still need to argue in the third and fourth paragraph that the support will not threaten the integrity of the arts. or the threat is tolerable.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2471 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.992 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.792 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.522 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.128 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...field of art, which raised a discussion whether or not government funding of the arts is benef...
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Line 5, column 564, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... artists without fearing too much about whether or not their arts would sell to the public. ...
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Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'experience'?
Suggestion: experience
...for the residents to obtain an adequate experiences of any kind of art. In such case, gover...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'kind of', 'of course', 'in my view', 'in some cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231329690346 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.136612021858 0.157235817809 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100182149362 0.0880659088768 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0546448087432 0.0497285424764 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0437158469945 0.0444667217837 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132969034608 0.12292977631 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0309653916211 0.0406280797675 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98792118716 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0309653916211 0.030933414821 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.111111111111 0.0997080785238 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0291438979964 0.0249443105267 117% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0109289617486 0.0148568991511 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3041.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 493.0 452.878318584 109% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16835699797 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356997971602 0.366273622748 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294117647059 0.280924506359 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20892494929 0.200843997647 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160243407708 0.132149295362 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98792118716 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 219.290929204 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.48968727796 96% => OK
Word variations: 54.0462307003 55.4138127331 98% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4347826087 23.380412469 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.369393339 59.4972553346 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.217391304 141.124799967 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4347826087 23.380412469 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.695652173913 0.674092028746 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 50.8465473146 51.4728631049 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.68217054264 1.64882698954 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.684332894721 0.391690518653 175% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130412102445 0.123202303941 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0700680657498 0.077325440228 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.548742379521 0.547984918172 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152180647969 0.149214159877 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.294427571566 0.161403998019 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145123007416 0.0892212321368 163% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.53613763236 0.385218514788 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0771948961688 0.0692045440612 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.523240688021 0.275328986314 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058685018631 0.0653680567796 90% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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