Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.

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Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.

Two views are stated in the issue. The first one implies, that media has a harmfull effect on children by showing violence. The latter one says, that parents and the peer groups are much powerful influence over children's behavior. I tend to incline on the former implication, mainly due to following reasons.

First of all, by showing violence, the media implicitly has sown a seed in viewer's mind of violence. While adults are less susceptible to this seed, children being immature are not that gaurded. Children are quick learners. They imbibe any external influence they are exposed to. And violence in media is not an exception to it. They tend to imitate what they see. A child might get angry and in that anger he might unknowingly do something that he saw in the media relating to violence.

As children don't know the gravity of their actions, they are less likely to think wisely before taking that action. Teenagers try to mimic things from movies just because they think that it is cool. Thus media definitely comes into the picture. If they show violence in higher proportions then it is bound to affect the minds of children. Reading that someone use a knife in a fight, imparts a negative impact on their cognitive thinking.

Although parents play an import role in child's development, the current scenario in which in most of the cases, both the parents are working, the parents really have very less time to look after their child. It is not possible in current corporate world to devote that much time towards the child. As a result, children are often left without a protective layers and learn things that they should not have learned in the first place.

On the other hand, peer groups do play a major part in shaping children. As they spend most of their time together, they influence each other to a larger extent. But as they themselves are of more or less of the same intellectual level, there is nothing to gaurd them from external influence.

Hence, due to all above points, it is advisable to the media not to show too much violence as they are also an important factor in shaping todays generation.

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Average: 6.2 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'more or less', 'in the first place', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218446601942 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.165048543689 0.157235817809 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0995145631068 0.0880659088768 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0533980582524 0.0497285424764 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0631067961165 0.0444667217837 142% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.131067961165 0.12292977631 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0388349514563 0.0406280797675 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.41961020158 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0412621359223 0.030933414821 133% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0946601941748 0.0997080785238 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00728155339806 0.0249443105267 29% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00485436893204 0.0148568991511 33% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2141.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 372.0 452.878318584 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75537634409 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.325268817204 0.366273622748 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.228494623656 0.280924506359 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155913978495 0.200843997647 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0913978494624 0.132149295362 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41961020158 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543010752688 0.48968727796 111% => OK
Word variations: 60.2837806742 55.4138127331 109% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.1739130435 23.380412469 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5647625953 59.4972553346 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0869565217 141.124799967 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1739130435 23.380412469 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.695652173913 0.674092028746 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 39.0233754091 51.4728631049 76% => OK
Elegance: 1.37931034483 1.64882698954 84% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371175741461 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0742039826496 0.123202303941 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0576505552234 0.077325440228 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.496680817751 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.168038236079 0.149214159877 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138986379336 0.161403998019 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684842222837 0.0892212321368 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301015913422 0.385218514788 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0579513134468 0.0692045440612 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238063155852 0.275328986314 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660508943647 0.0653680567796 101% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.5995575221 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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