Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
Every child is born with almost the same physical and mental abilities. The behavior of the child is dependent on the surrounding in which one has grown up. During the small age, mind of the children are pure and like white plain paper. White plain paper tells us that one is new to this materialistic and mean world, and one can write anything what one intends to. The issue here that the highest influence is whether of the media or the peers and parents on the kids mind is contentious. I agree that people are influenced by the the parents and peers but it can be no more than the attraction towards media.
Today, the main focus of the media and news has been concentrated towards the bad world. Almost most of the time what we see is someone killed a person, a girl was molested, robbery took place or a terrorist attack over a country. Viewers of this shows including children gets influenced by this negative scenarios and this all runs around people's mind for the whole day. One watches that one can easily get materialistic wealth is no reasonable time and this one aspect is the greatest attraction to greedy minds.
Government now is taking major steps to censor this type of content, as they also know the bad effects this creates in the minds of children. Parents and peers also take an important role in overall development and behavior of the children. They make them think positive but a single positive word or sentence can't change the view of the children which he has seen through. Parents don't think that there is any need during the very early age of a child to teach a child. The teach the positives of the world later by the time child has already been influenced by the violent environment. Also, one knows that a bad apple can make all the apples in the basket go bad.
Patel Andolan which recently took place in the state of Gujarat in India had most of them as youth. They made all the possible harm to the government and the country. What influenced then was the movies they watched which showed then that taking andolan will make government do what people want.
The violent nature that one sees around can be overruled if one teaches that violent activities may harm a person or society but indirectly the culprit is one himself. Parents and peer has a role but it doesn't overrule the influence of the media and violence which makes them get everything fast.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59069767442 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34990074932 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504651162791 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.407812912 60.3974514979 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.0 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 5.21951772744 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145084513621 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494170006507 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601221034852 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080940314118 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383246454059 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.