Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely alig

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Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

When it comes to the issue the purpose of education, some people believe that the academic education prepare students to have free mind. However, others have the opposite view and think that restrains students’ mind and spirit. As far as I am concerned, this matter is controversial and we must consider it from several aspects.

First let us take a look on why some disagree the formal education allows students to think freely. It is quite normal that a child—before going to school—has not the correct understanding of the reality, so he lives in limited world. The formal education assists him to become familiar with many academic areas, and know more about the real world. In addition, he can improve his critical thinking and make plenty of questions and ask them from teachers. So, the formal education not only does not limited students’ thinking but also help them to think about many things, which they do not know about them before going to the school.

A further point we must consider is that formal education provide a suitable condition, which allows people to develop their skills. I think that a small example can give some light to this topic. I think that there is not a better example than one who wants to be a great writer. He can stay at home and try to write a unique novel, while he surely cannot find a unique idea or at least how to expand it. However, the school lets him to become familiar with many striking writing of various writers, which spirit him. IN addition, he learns how to look at the world for creating the unique work art.

In contrast, in some areas the formal education imposes some facts on students. For instance, the students have to obey some regular in the schools like doing homework on time, making effort for gaining high grades in the test, and paying more time for study. These can be

All above evidence supports this fact that formal education allows people to think critically and also affect their spirit positively. Of course, as an English proverb goes “a coin has two sides”; therefore, those who disagree with this matter partially reasonable that the formal education limited students in some cases. Nevertheless, I believe that the formal education does not restrain students mind and spirit.

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'at least', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'of course', 'in some cases']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207674943567 0.240241500013 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.164785553047 0.157235817809 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0948081264108 0.0880659088768 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0496613995485 0.0497285424764 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.058690744921 0.0444667217837 132% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10835214447 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.020316027088 0.0406280797675 50% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53663363351 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0361173814898 0.030933414821 117% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10158013544 0.0997080785238 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0158013544018 0.0249443105267 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.020316027088 0.0148568991511 137% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2294.0 2732.02544248 84% => OK
No of words: 390.0 452.878318584 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.88205128205 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358974358974 0.366273622748 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.24358974359 0.280924506359 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.158974358974 0.200843997647 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0846153846154 0.132149295362 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53663363351 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.48968727796 109% => OK
Word variations: 59.5581846428 55.4138127331 107% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5263157895 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4833662246 59.4972553346 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.736842105 141.124799967 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.842105263158 0.674092028746 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 44.8852901484 51.4728631049 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.23140495868 1.64882698954 75% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.509856489033 0.391690518653 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0827812604147 0.123202303941 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.064198449978 0.077325440228 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.50052182126 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155868068465 0.149214159877 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184733588973 0.161403998019 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936566479617 0.0892212321368 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267492173299 0.385218514788 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0802437779873 0.0692045440612 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321328177505 0.275328986314 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626434243324 0.0653680567796 96% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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