Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Regarding formal education, some people believe that it free people’s mind and spirit; others believe it tends to restrain the mind and spirit. Well think about Albert Einstein, would he develop the Theory of Relativity if he had been uneducated? The answer is negative. The formal education may restrain the wild imagination of people; however, it provides the foundation for the mind to think of more practical possibilities. Hence, my view is more closely align with that formal education helps free the mind.
Formal education free our mind and spirit. First, formal education frees us from ignorance. Formal education provides us the knowledge base on which we can think of ways of in order to solve problems and achieve our goals. For example, in order to save a patient, a doctor needs medical knowledge, which he has learned from medical school. Without formal education in medical science, one can have imagined whatever he wants, he will unlikely help with the patients. So, formal education free us from ignorance. Formal education provides us the sea of knowledge that we can use to solve all different problems.
In addition, formal education free us from limited resources. At school, we learn various ways of finding deeper and wider range of knowledge that we need. By doing so, we are able to get access to unlimited knowledge, which broadens our horizons and boosts our awareness of indefinite possibilities. Moreover, formal education strengthens our skills of critical thinking. We are guided to think of different ways of approaching the same issue and encouraged to wonder all kinds of possibilities. Therefore, formal education provides the mind with the knowledge base, ways of accessing to more resources and skills of critical thinking. Therefore, formal education free the mind with limitless possibilities.
Admittedly, formal education may restrain people’s wild imagination. While educators try to provide all kinds of knowledge and skills, they have to follow the curriculum, educational policies, say, NO Child Left Behind, and all kinds of standard such as Common Core Standards. Due to the policies and standards, students have to pass all kinds of test. Along with the journey of learning and testing, students’ mind may be circumscribed by the practical imaginations and solutions. However, while limiting the rambling imagination, formal education makes the imagination more meaningful. For example, ask two people, one is educated and the other one is not, why the apple is falling. Without the knowledge of physics, one can give you all kinds of explanations, but it will hardly touch the real issue. My point is that without education, people’s wild imagination is likely futile.
It is true that the wild imaginations could be inhibited, but formal education provides knowledge that promotes people’s imagination and creativity in a more feasible manner so as to solve all kinds of problems in life. So, formal education does not restrain the minds and spirits.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Regarding formal education, some people believe that it free people's mind and spirit; others believe it tends to restrain the mind and spirit.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to it and free
flaws:
According to the requirement:
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
the pattern should be something like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
----------------------
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2450 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.104 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.552 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.731 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.69 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.215 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 900, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os;s wild imagination is likely futile. It is true that the wild imaginations co...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 180, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nd creativity in a more feasible manner so as to solve all kinds of problems in life. So...
^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255731922399 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.144620811287 0.157235817809 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0987654320988 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0335097001764 0.0497285424764 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0529100529101 0.0444667217837 119% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10582010582 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0282186948854 0.0406280797675 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.95409320548 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.026455026455 0.030933414821 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0687830687831 0.0997080785238 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0194003527337 0.0249443105267 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00881834215168 0.0148568991511 59% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3040.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 480.0 452.878318584 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.33333333333 6.0361032391 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397916666667 0.366273622748 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.314583333333 0.280924506359 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.258333333333 0.200843997647 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.18125 0.132149295362 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95409320548 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 219.290929204 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4625 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.4560060753 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5517241379 23.380412469 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8033848035 59.4972553346 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.827586207 141.124799967 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5517241379 23.380412469 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.620689655172 0.674092028746 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 48.0100574713 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.68702290076 1.64882698954 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.549878742417 0.391690518653 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131561056312 0.123202303941 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0988135493236 0.077325440228 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.482348499003 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140121321891 0.149214159877 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194430853506 0.161403998019 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097776979966 0.0892212321368 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.409502616498 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0590912107454 0.0692045440612 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.3756258663 0.275328986314 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789766819078 0.0653680567796 121% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 26.0 13.5995575221 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.