Some violence believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
In the generation where the technological advancement has been to such a great extent, it is evident that media will play an crucial role in the behavior of the human beings. Nowadays, people are relying mostly on the technologies and it has become a necessity rather than luxury in their life.
In the first prong, the author tells us about the belief that violence in our society is increasing due to the increasing violence in the media and its effects are seen mostly on the childrens. As said in the first paragraph, at present, people rely on technologies more and more compared to the previous days. It is rightly evident from the fact that childrens are spending more time on television and mobiles rather than playing with friends. Due to this, they learn from what they see on these systems making media playing an cardinal role in their life. If people tend to see malicious content, these will generate a bad behavior on their part. On the other hand, if people tend to watch or accept qualities which are benign and innocuous from these things then they are more likely to be of good nature. Therefore, it is true that media affects the behavior of the person and with increasing violence among the media, there will be increase in violene among the soicieties also.
In the second prong, the author tells us that children's peer groups and parental role models have much more powerful influence on the children's behavior. I strongly agree with the author. People tend to change their lifestyle according to their peer groups. They want to be like the person who has strong influence in their groups to have a prominent position. It is important how the child chooses his peer groups in the society and this can be done at ease with the parental guidance. Without proper guidance, they lead to any path which they find interesting. Proper parental guidance is necessary during the growth period of child.
In the end, I would conclude with that although media plays a major role in the behavior of children, but child's peer groups and parental role models have a stong influence on his or her behavior comparatively as they live with them most of the time.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'it is true', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227383863081 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.154034229829 0.157235817809 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0953545232274 0.0880659088768 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0366748166259 0.0497285424764 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0684596577017 0.0444667217837 154% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.139364303178 0.12292977631 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0366748166259 0.0406280797675 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44866673067 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0293398533007 0.030933414821 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114914425428 0.0997080785238 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0122249388753 0.0249443105267 49% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146699266504 0.0148568991511 99% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2176.0 2732.02544248 80% => OK
No of words: 378.0 452.878318584 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75661375661 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.325396825397 0.366273622748 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.219576719577 0.280924506359 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164021164021 0.200843997647 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0952380952381 0.132149295362 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44866673067 2.79330140395 88% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 219.290929204 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489417989418 0.48968727796 100% => OK
Word variations: 52.2059551164 55.4138127331 94% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2352941176 23.380412469 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1413437033 59.4972553346 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 23.380412469 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.674092028746 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 44.1929660753 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.55660377358 1.64882698954 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415054053491 0.391690518653 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.139256305878 0.123202303941 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0595862163186 0.077325440228 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.523406028287 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189920522337 0.149214159877 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1547741338 0.161403998019 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114587657826 0.0892212321368 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.46917641083 0.385218514788 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0587205830062 0.0692045440612 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282637296306 0.275328986314 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495127599567 0.0653680567796 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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