Universities should require students to take courses only within those fields they are interested in studying.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The author of the statement above argued that university students should be required to attend only to the courses which best match their field of interest. Personally, I tend to mostly disagree with his sentence as even if, nowadays, high specialization is strictly required in business scene, it is also fundamental to have a wide knowledge.
In this essay I will introduce my personal opinion providing supports of my thesis on both working and personal side.
Firstly, I will talk about the effect of the policy implementation on working side. Even if it is often argued that the hire of more specialized students could increase the technical level of a company, the results on the net productivity are less certain. In the latest times, it is becoming even more common to make people work in multidisciplinary teams. For this reason, I am strongly convinced that having a wider knowledge, which includes even other fields aside of the one of main interest, could help employees to better collaborate and understand each other.
Even if the implementation of the policy would bring more skilled student, it would be too much dangerous for the working environment.
On the other side of the argument, having a multi-fields background studies could support people also in their personal lives. As a matter of fact, having different interest make people more openminded and motivated to understand the world as a whole and not as something divided into tiny pieces. A good example of that were 15th century’s scientists, as Galileo Galilei. He is worldwide know for his physical studies, but just the minority know that he was also a brilliant writer. Of course his works were about his scientific researches but his writing style suggests that he also had a deep background in literature.
Because of thus, the policy adoption may represent a risk to make students become less passionate about life and less eager to know.
In conclusion, the policy described by the author of the sentence above would be dangerous for pupils in both their working and personal life, as they won’t be able to interact with people coming from different studies and they will lose an overall view of what the world is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'wide knowledge'.
Suggestion: wide knowledge
...s scene, it is also fundamental to have a wide knowledge. In this essay I will introduce my per...
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Line 4, column 35, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...dge. In this essay I will introduce my personal opinion providing supports of my thesis on both...
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Line 12, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ngerous for pupils in both their working and personal life, as they won’t be able...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, in conclusion, of course, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07246376812 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82838999434 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538647342995 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4223060498 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.529411765 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321417527487 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951945580081 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154020595953 0.0758088955206 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128552606205 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156779468715 0.0667264976115 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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