Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
It is said, youth defines and writes the future for tomorrow. It is indeed true that youth should target a long-term, realisitic goal rather than seeking a goal possessed with instant fame and recognition. A long term goal not only horizons the welfare of self-being but also contributes in upbringing of society and nation. Also, given exceptions, it must not be ignored that targeting an immediate aim does not help in promoting overall prosperity, provided undertaking a rational and benevolent goal.
A long term goal sheds a light on existing issues and tends to eradicate them as well. When a young mind undertakes a challenge or rather a pertaining issue and is able to fathom and solve, he/she is termed as an inspiration in our society, later resulting in as astounding entrepreneurs. This reflects they are diligent, have ability to take risks, audacity to challenge self and even propose new ideas. For example, Microsoft founder Bill Gates and late CEO of Apple Inc. Steve Jobs, as a young mind, proposed numerate out of box ideas and were able to establish a small firm which later went on to be the biggest cell phone and computer manufacturing and selling company in the world, provided the path they took was filled with several obstructions and challenges. In addition, Hans Zimmer from Frankfurt, Germany and A.R.Rahman from Chennai, India, both were predetermined to learn music from an early age. Today, they are the pioneers of modern music industry and have managed to be persistent in producing some of the best musical melodies ever composed.
Setting a goal filled with recognition does not certainly means taking a short-term goal. Sure, there are temporary perks which are yielded by such goals, but these certainly do not provide human satisfaction and inner peace. Examples, famous golfer Tiger Woods was inspected and pleaded guilty in a scandal which led to abomination of his career. Los Angeles born Shia LaBeouf, starred in one of the best science fiction movie series, Transformers, was accused for assaulting his neighbor with a deadly weapon for a trivial reason like blocking his path with his car. It can be concluded that fame played a major key role in destruction of their career and coined them as notorious celebrities.
But having fame is not every time negligent or heedless. Stating an exception, Lebrown James, a famous American basketball player from Cleaveland, helped almost 800 children to graduate from high school. Similarly, a young popular band, One Direction, set various concerts and collected almost $340000 in support for cancer. Hence, having fame depends on one's self attitude, weather to continue with a superfluous path or to undertake a benign one.
Thus, a long-term goal surely helps to benefit the human world, provided the goal is rational. Similar case is with the individual undertaking taking a fame packed path. It is often said, the biggest challenge about success is the ability to keep quiet. Thus, it may be a long term or short term goal, the results and ramifications ultimately depends on attitude and behavior of the individual undertaking the goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 827, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Rahman
... Zimmer from Frankfurt, Germany and A.R.Rahman from Chennai, India, both were predeter...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...led with recognition does not certainly means taking a short-term goal. Sure, there a...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256944444444 0.240241500013 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.178819444444 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105902777778 0.0880659088768 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0486111111111 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0295138888889 0.0444667217837 66% => OK
Prepositions: 0.09375 0.12292977631 76% => OK
Participles: 0.0538194444444 0.0406280797675 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7510992007 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0243055555556 0.030933414821 79% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0850694444444 0.0997080785238 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00694444444444 0.0249443105267 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00694444444444 0.0148568991511 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3136.0 2732.02544248 115% => OK
No of words: 516.0 452.878318584 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07751937984 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375968992248 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282945736434 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.191860465116 0.200843997647 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139534883721 0.132149295362 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7510992007 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 219.290929204 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596899224806 0.48968727796 122% => OK
Word variations: 78.6889539822 55.4138127331 142% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4347826087 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3343813133 59.4972553346 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.347826087 141.124799967 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4347826087 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.478260869565 0.674092028746 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 50.7293562521 51.4728631049 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.57432432432 1.64882698954 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364663047352 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.081067104885 0.123202303941 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0496120739028 0.077325440228 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.480079325903 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.117060957681 0.149214159877 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11532249756 0.161403998019 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514688535221 0.0892212321368 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.181278725417 0.385218514788 47% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0730542182157 0.0692045440612 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213424482093 0.275328986314 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518752549765 0.0653680567796 79% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.