causes and effects of urban drift
The chart shows the possible causes and effects of urban drift, where large numbers of people move from rural areas to urban areas.
There are numbers of reasons which create hamlet’s citizens migrate to cities. Firstly, the usage of fossil fuels which impacted the climate changes both in the villages and in the municipalities. This portent affected to the poor harvests and created people transport from the countryside to the inner-city.
Next reason is the expectations of pastoral’s citizens to earn more money and obtain the better lifestyle. These expectancies influence people to move around to urban. Due to the migration, there are some obstructions such as lack of work fields, overcrowding and poor housing in the cities. So, only young men can live in the metropolis.
Furthermore, these difficulties construct the other problems. For instance, disease and social problem both in cities and rural areas.
This ends my report.
Sentence: Firstly, the usage of fossil fuels which impacted the climate changes both in the villages and in the municipalities.
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