The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The diagram shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women in a typical week in 1998-1999. Information given on the chart is about people of five types of employment status, to be more precise, about full-time, part-time employed,unemployed, retired people and housewives.
From the chart it is easily shown that index of unemployed and retired males also,unemployed and retired females share the same amount. According to given data it is also clearly visible that the third biggest indigator belongs to housewives and it is approximately 50 hours, and hours spent by employed full-time males are slightly different from it.
The smallest amount belongs to males with full-time job and the hours spared by them are more than part-time employed males' leisure time.
We can also stress that regardless to various employment status the leisure hours spent by people are not more than 85 hours.
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