The chart below shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
(the graph is on the following link :- http://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/685/)
The graph represents the percentage of people aged 65 and above in the US between the years 1900 and 2000.
It can be seen that the total percentage of aged people has been increasing through out the years until 1990. After 1990 there was a slight drop in the percentage of aged people. It started off with 4.1% in 1900 to 12.6% in 1990 and a fall to 12.4%in 2000.
For more convenience and better representation the graph has been divided into age groups of 65-74 years, 75-84 years and 85+. It is clear from the graph that the percentage of people in the age group 65-74 kept inc...
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flaws:
Number of Paragraphs: 6 4
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: body 1
para 3: body 2
para 4: conclusion
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 10
No. of Words: 246 200
No. of Characters: 1053 1000
No. of Different Words: 112 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.96 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.28 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.293 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 47 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.096 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.133 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.659 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 4