The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

A survey describing Japanese tourists traveling abroad and their attendance in Australian from 1985 to 1995 was illustrated in these charts.

The first chart describes that there is a gradual rise of tourists from Japan going other countries. During this period, the improvement recorded in the picture shows that its rise reached approximately 10 millions. However, there is a slight drop occurring in 1991. Between 1992 and 1993, there was a plateau which its growth was about 11.8 millions. After that, it increased until 1995 by around 15%.

The second exhibit shows that there was a significant increase of Japanese tourists coming to Australia. As long as the first decade, the highest percentage happened in 1989 which reached by almost 5%. A year later it decreased but then dramatically grew until 1994 by more than 6%. Nevertheless, there was a slight drop a year later.

In conclusion, both of charts indicates that year-to-year Japanese tourists were raise by average a half million. This growth also occurred in percentage Japanese attending to Australia that was successfully recorded by 4% during a decade.

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