Compared to previous generation, an increasing number of people are traveling overseas for hollidays
Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend
Nowadays, an incerasing number of people traveling overseas on holidays (get) are getting a lot of attention because it’s very different from previous generation which tend to take their vacation only in their country, even just around their town.
This trend shows that the time has changed and also many people now realise how many beautiful things outside their country, many media such as tv cable, internet and variety of magazines and newspaper also play an important role.
Honestly, This trend is very good for people in order to refresh their mind from routinity, according to an old research from reputable university in europe, people become very interested and happy if they find something new in their lives. This feeling can bring them back to their happy moments as a child when they were able to create something or when they saw something new.
However, despite all postive things that keep rising, this trend make every tourism business industry become aware and their competitors are getting bigger. When they have to compete with another industry from another country, they must use a new technology to promote their business, not only for domestic tourist but also for International tourists.
all media and technology have made a lot of people can gather information by themselves, make all tourism industry changed, and point up sales target from international tourists.
Sentence: Nowadays, an incerasing number of people traveling overseas on holidays get are getting a lot of attention because it's very different from previous generation which tend to take their vacation only in their country, even just around their town.
Description: The fragment holidays get are is rare
Sentence: However, despite all postive things that keep rising, this trend make every tourism business industry become aware and their competitors are getting bigger.
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Sentence: Nowadays, an incerasing number of people traveling overseas on holidays get are getting a lot of attention because it's very different from previous generation which tend to take their vacation only in their country, even just around their town.
Error: incerasing Suggestion: increasing
Sentence: This trend shows that the time has changed and also many people now realise how many beautiful things outside their country, many media such as tv cable, internet and variety of magazines and newspaper also play an important role.
Error: realise Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Honestly, This trend is very good for people in order to refresh their mind from routinity, according to an old research from reputable university in europe, people become very interested and happy if they find something new in their lives.
Error: routinity Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, despite all postive things that keep rising, this trend make every tourism business industry become aware and their competitors are getting bigger.
Error: postive Suggestion: positive
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