The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.
The diagram demonstrates the information about how the Australian Bureau collects the information to forecast weather condition. There are four steps in transferring the information: incoming information, analysis and forecasting, preparing and broadcast.
In the first step, information is transfered by satellite, radar and drifting buoy in the sea. The information from satellite is analyzed by satellite photo while the information from radar is analyzed by radar screen. In addition, the information form drifting buoy is analyzed by sypnotic chart. The result from analysis forecasting would ...
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Sentence: Finally, the weather forecasts is ready to be broadcasted by using three different medias: television, radio and recorded announcement.
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Sentence: In the first step, information is transfered by satellite, radar and drifting buoy in the sea.
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Sentence: In addition, the information form drifting buoy is analyzed by sypnotic chart.
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Sentence: Finally, the weather forecasts is ready to be broadcasted by using three different medias: television, radio and recorded announcement.
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Sentence: Interestingly, the information from satellite and drifting buoy is not only transmitted to satellite photo and sypnotic chart respectively, but also to radar to be analyzed in radar screen.
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