The Diagram of How Chocolate is Made
The diagram shows how the chocolate is made. First, the raw chocolate is input to cocoa graining. In this process, the waste of the raw chocolate will be separated from the cocoa liquor. After that, the cocoa liquor is divided into two lines in pressing process and the other one becomes industrial chocolate. In pressing process, the output are cocoa butter and cocoa powder.
To get the chocolate bar, cocoa butter and sugar, plus other ingredients are needed. Another output of the process is chocolate that used in food industry. It can be produced from the cocoa powder that resulted from pressing process.
The second diagram shows how the price of chocolate bar is divided up. The highest percentage of what makes the chocolate bar is different with the other is the cost of ingredients and overheads which is hold 35% of the total. The second highest factor is supermarket which hold 34%, followed by tax, chocolate company, and farmer, third to fifth respectively.
Unlike the cost of ingredients and overheads, farmer is the lowest factor to contribute in how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up, with only 4%.
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Sentence: The highest percentage of what makes the chocolate bar is different with the other is the cost of ingredients and overheads which is hold 35 of the total.
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