The diagram show about why the Vietnamese move to America and how they survive with the war.
At the began, there was a war of Vietnam and a lot of village get destroyed by enemy. Almost all of the place and infrastructure in the village have gone because of bomb and war of gun. Many of the villagers moved to the city to get a better life than live in the village. In fact, that was just made the city became more crowded because of many people live there. The city became a place with no hope for the transmigran, there were no jobs for them and they did not get better facilities to improve their lived.
Next, the Vietnamese decided to learn American English for prepare to move to America. They hoped if they move to America that could increase their value of life. They learned that language to make easy for communicate with the foreigner in America and help their live there to bring better life.
Overall, the Vietnamese need to safe their live from the war so they moved to America and learned American English to improve their life.
At the began,
At the beginning,
Sentence: Next, the Vietnamese decided to learn American English for prepare to move to America.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to for and prepare
Sentence: They learned that language to make easy for communicate with the foreigner in America and help their live there to bring better life.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to for and communicate
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 175 200
No. of Characters: 760 1000
No. of Different Words: 89 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.637 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.343 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.198 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 40 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 13 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.425 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4