Due to fear of crimes, people are a fraid of leaving home. Some people think that little can be done to improve it while others may argue that action can be taken to improve the situation. What is your opinion and why?
Nowadays, people's living standard is improved, but there are also many problems disturbing our daily life, especially crimes, which is produced from various fields. Because of that, people even have no brave to leave home, scaring that something bad will happen. It is such a deteriate sociecial phenomenon that some people believe that no way can change it, while some others hold the opposite opinion. As for as i am concerned, i believe excellent education and stricter punishment can decline crime rate.
Initially, crime is definetely a difficulty to be dealed with, for so many reasons lead to this,such as poverty, hungry and even some incidents in life. What is worse, increasingly number of younsters join the group of crime, which is hard to be imagined, and a lot of movies filled with violence are popular among children ,which is also a big challenge for controling it.
While, humanities can creat such problem, we can also solve it. The first thing we tackle this problem is education. No one was bad when borned, so education should shoulder this obligation for finding the root reason of crime, and thinking over their thoughts, then we can weaken people's will to crime through correctly guidness. Education not only creats outstanding person, but also make people dangerous, therefore, excellent education is the prerequisite of a steable society.
Besides, enhancing punishamen is also a good method, people who commit crimes are just common person, and they scare of punishment, if that so, the offensers can be aware of this severe problem before commit a crime. This measure could not take crimes to the end, though, it is a perfect choice to control this phenomenon.
Overall, social crime is one of the most difficult to be solved problems and efficient efforts contribute to a wonderful furture. Meanwhile, other efforts should be coordinated to solve this, after then, we can truely enjoy s fantastic life.
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Sentence: What is worse, increasingly number of younsters join the group of crime, which is hard to be imagined, and a lot of movies filled with violence are popular among children ,which is also a big challenge for controling it.
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Sentence: While, humanities can creat such problem, we can also solve it.
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Sentence: The first thing we tackle this problem is education.
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Sentence: No one was bad when borned, so education should shoulder this obligation for finding the root reason of crime, and thinking over their thoughts, then we can weaken people's will to crime through correctly guidness.
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Sentence: Education not only creats outstanding person, but also make people dangerous, therefore, excellent education is the prerequisite of a steable society.
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Sentence: Besides, enhancing punishamen is also a good method, people who commit crimes are just common person, and they scare of punishment, if that so, the offensers can be aware of this severe problem before commit a crime.
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Sentence: This measure could not take crimes to the end, though, it is a perfect choice to control this phenomenon.
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Sentence: Overall, social crime is one of the most difficult to be solved problems and efficient efforts contribute to a wonderful furture.
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Sentence: Meanwhile, other efforts should be coordinated to solve this, after then, we can truely enjoy s fantastic life.
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Sentence: Nowadays, people's living standard is improved, but there are also many problems disturbing our daily life, especially crimes, which is produced from various fields.
Description: The fragment , especially crimes is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace especially with adjective
Sentence: Because of that, people even have no brave to leave home, scaring that something bad will happen.
Description: The word bad is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to bad
Sentence: It is such a deteriate sociecial phenomenon that some people believe that no way can change it, while some others hold the opposite opinion.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: As for as i am concerned, i believe excellent education and stricter punishment can decline crime rate.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Initially, crime is definetely a difficulty to be dealed with, for so many reasons lead to this,such as poverty, hungry and even some incidents in life.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a comma
Suggestion: Refer to with and ,
Sentence: What is worse, increasingly number of younsters join the group of crime, which is hard to be imagined, and a lot of movies filled with violence are popular among children ,which is also a big challenge for controling it.
Description: The fragment , increasingly number is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace increasingly with adjective
Sentence: While, humanities can creat such problem, we can also solve it.
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Sentence: The first thing we tackle this problem is education.
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Sentence: No one was bad when borned, so education should shoulder this obligation for finding the root reason of crime, and thinking over their thoughts, then we can weaken people's will to crime through correctly guidness.
Description: The word shoulder is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to shoulder
Description: The word will is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to will
Description: The fragment through correctly guidness is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace correctly with adjective
Sentence: Education not only creats outstanding person, but also make people dangerous, therefore, excellent education is the prerequisite of a steable society.
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