In the future we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problems it will cause

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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines replace many of the tasks we do at home and at work. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problems it will cause.

Undoubtadly, the latest technology has given variety of user-friendly machines in last few decades and also will continue to invent new idea in the future. Using machines at home or at work are always a time-saving. The more we use machines, the more we get leisure time. But this can be always resulted in positive.Increasing numbers of machine at home or work-place may face many disadvantages as well as advantages.

To begin,reduced quality time with family members can be increased in the future. Today,most family members complains about lack of time to spend with each-other, especially, a working woman. Even-though, technology has given given enormous range of households machines like, washing-machine, microwave oven, or may be a food processor. It requires a manual start and end process by human only. However, recently Japan has introduced a house-wife robot who does all home-works, from cleaning to cooking. In such instances, a working woman can spend more time with their family, specially with children who needs more attention. Moreover, it will be proven as a god to the aged people who are living alone. They will be able to live independently with the help of such robot machines.

Secondly, people will try to become more social, which is again a very lifelike problem in today's society. By using more machines at work, people can use their leisure time to get socialized. They can attend more family functions and can increase the social contacts, which is necessary for personal as well as family growth. However, replacement of physical activities by machines has negative effects as well.

We are already facing a major side-effect of machines, like, laziness in majority of people. People are become so dependent on machines that they feel handicap without machines. As a result, they faces health problems like, obesity, diabetes, cardiac attacks, and many more.The society is already facing the consequences of using more machines at work and home. In future it is going to increase the problem more rather to solve.

To summaries, more quality time and increases in social appearance will outweigh the other problems which may raise due to extensive use of machines in future.

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Sentence: Eventhough, technology has given given enomrous range of households machines like, washing-machine, microwave oven, or may be a food processor.
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Sentence: People are become so dependent on machines that they feel handicap without machines.
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Sentence: As a result, they faces health problems like, obesity, diabetes, cardiac attacks, and many more.The society is already facing the consequencies of using more machines at work and home.
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Sentence: In future it is going to increase the problem more rather to solve.
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Sentence: But this can be always reslted in positive.Increasing numbers of machine at home or work-place may face many disavantages as well as advantages.
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Error: reslted Suggestion: rested

Sentence: To begin,reduced quality time with family members can be icreased in the future.
Error: icreased Suggestion: increased

Sentence: Eventhough, technology has given given enomrous range of households machines like, washing-machine, microwave oven, or may be a food processor.
Error: enomrous Suggestion: enormous

Sentence: By using more machines at work, people can use their leisure time to get socialised.
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Sentence: We are already facing a major side-effect of machines, like, lazyness in majority of people.
Error: lazyness Suggestion: laziness

Sentence: To summeries, more quality time and increases in social appearance will outweigh the other problems which may raise due to extensive use of machines in future.
Error: summeries Suggestion: summaries

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Score: ? out of 9
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.338 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Thank you. I am reconfirming my band as in IELTS class for the same essay my sir has given me 6 band. What would you say about this?

I am really confuse about my essay level. Am I at band 7 level? Because in class I never got band 7 for same essays which I submitted online. For my last essay also I got 7 from you but in class I got 6 only.

Please help.

Thank you

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No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7

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