The graph shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960,1980and 2000.

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The graph shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960,1980and 2000.

The given vertical bar graph gives details about the mode of transport in the year 1960,1980 and 2000in one European cites.The modes of transports under review are namely train,car,tube and bus.The vertical axis shows the percentage of commuters and horizontal axis depict the mode of transport and years.

Is clearly seen that,the popularity of bus transport in the year 1960was taken over by cars in the year 2000.In the year 1960 the popular mode of transport was bus 38%that was much more higher than cars.The year 1980,tube and cars became equally popular with 23% people.The difference between the train and bus are minimal around 28%.

After forty years from 1960,in 2000 there were remarkable difference between the percentage of commuters in these modes of transport.From 1960to2000,the figure of bus user followed a decreasing trend,falling from 38%to15%respectively.While the proportion of car commuters made a significant improvement,growing from 7% to 38% over period of 4 decades.There were not gigantic difference could be noticed between train and tube travelers in both begining and ending.

Hence it is lucid that huge number of people liked to travel by private transport cars. cars has thrown the importance of other and bus at the back seat.bus was less used in the last ten year period.

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Sentence: The vertical axis shows the percentage of commuters and horizontal axis depict the mode of transport and years.
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Sentence: There were not gigantic difference could be noticed between train and tube travelers in both begining and ending.
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