The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

Essay topics:

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

Given are the charts providing clear information about the different types of music albums consumed by people in terms of sex and age in Britain.

According to the information bar, it is clearly seen that the amount of males purchasing pop music albums was more than females, precisely they indicate 23 % and 14 % respectively. Meanwhile, in terms of buying rock music men were also domineering with approximately 10 % more people than females, whilst this difference becomes less, about 3 % on the third chart showing the percentages of people who buy classical music.

It is also observed that, in Britain 25- 34 aged people prefer to buy pop music, followed by 16-24 and 35-44 aged people. Similar pattern is illustrated on the proportion of people choosing classical music. In comparison with other groups, people with 45 and over are more likely to listen to classical music whereas only 2 % and 4 % of people aged 16-24 and 35-44 listen to this type accordingly.

Overall, the major conclusion drawn from this charts is that people’s choice changes depending on their sex and age.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (2 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Sentence: Overall, the major conclusion drawn from this charts is that people's choice changes depending on their sex and age.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and charts

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 180 200
No. of Characters: 875 1000
No. of Different Words: 106 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.663 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.861 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.599 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 40 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.207 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.494 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.786 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4