It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss merits and demerits of living in a media rich society.
In this rampant age of globalization, the lifestyle of people is gaining ground very swiftly. At present, the inventions of media forms such as television, mobile phone, internet and newspapers have upgraded of the quaility of lifestyle of human being. By contrast, it has drawbacks side too. Here, I would like to establish both pros and cons of media forms with my perception.
To set in, there are manifold merits of media forms. First and foremost, media forms have made easiar our work fields as these offers us manifold facilities at our home like we can shopping by internet and give oeders by mobile phone and using internet. In addition, these are great source of communication with other countries. Moreover, media forms are great source of entertainment as these allow us to watch movies, listening music and internet offers a chance of spend time by facebook and search manifold latest good sites. What is more, we are getting great knowledge by media forms like we know very well what is happening in our whole world.
Conversely, these are numerous drawbacks of media forms. First and foremost, these are very harmful for our health. Moreover, these are creating manifold diseases like heartattack, brain problems. In addition, people are spoiling their future as small children sitting whole time in front of television and watching useless carton channels. What is more, numerous people are using facebook and internet during work time.
From my notion, media froms have both positive and negative sides. These have given us manifold great facilities but on the other hand, these are losing our health, waste time and waste mobey. These are useful for us but these have numerouse effects on ourselves.
In a nutshell, we should try to save us from their side effects and use them according to ourselves needs. It is better for our bright future and we can save our lives.
Sentence: First and foremost, media forms have made easiar our work fields as these offers us manifold facilities at our home like we can shopping by internet and give oeders by mobile phone and using internet.
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Suggestion: Refer to can and shopping
Sentence: Moreover, media forms are great source of entertainment as these allow us to watch movies, listening music and internet offers a chance of spend time by facebook and search manifold latest good sites.
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Suggestion: Refer to of and spend
Sentence: At present, the inventions of media forms such as television, mobile phone, internet and newspapers have upgraded of the quaility of lifestyle of human being.
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Sentence: First and foremost, media forms have made easiar our work fields as these offers us manifold facilities at our home like we can shopping by internet and give oeders by mobile phone and using internet.
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Sentence: These have given us manifold great facilities but on the other hand, these are losing our health, waste time and waste mobey.
Error: mobey Suggestion: money
Sentence: These are useful for us but these have numerouse effects on ourselves.
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