It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school has advantages and disadvantages. This essay would like to discuss the right condition that what reason they mix with each other and what reason they separate with each other.
I believe that there are benefit if they mix with each other, so they could competition each other. If one student has same level of abilities put in same class so the study process could be more enjoyable and faster than they mix each other. Beside that the teacher can use same method to teach them, and also it will be more eficiently time to teach in the class. For estance, if some students have less ability to understand the lesson quickly, and they mix with clever children, so the students with low abilities will difficult to follow the study process. They may be lazy to study because they can not understand what the teacher explain. On the other hand the clever students will be lazy also to study if the teacher has to repeat the lesson to make other students understand.
Another problem is about the different of social backgrounds. Teachers have occupy an important role to educate all students. Not only they teach about lesson material in the school but also the students are taught about a good attitude. How one student has good relationship to other students, so they can appreciate each other and they don not have different status between poor children and rich children. It has positive impact if they put together in one class, in order to the children come from high level economy of their family background can learn to enter a simple lives. On the contrary, the children come from medium or low level economy of their family background will not discourage because they can play with all their friends in the school.
In my opinion, I agree that it is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities mix with each other at school, so they can be active and more effective to study because they have friends with equivalent skills. And I disagree that the children with variety of social backgrounds have to separately because it is bad impact for their mental development that the poor children background will feel inferior to rich children backgrounds. In contract the rich children will be arrogant to other children that having low economy backgrounds.
Sentence: I believe that there are benefit if they mix with each other, so they could competition each other.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to could and competition
Sentence: Beside that the teacher can use same method to teach them, and also it will be more eficiently time to teach in the class.
Description: The fragment more eficiently time is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace eficiently with adjective
Sentence: For estance, if some students have less ability to understand the lesson quickly, and they mix with clever children, so the students with low abilities will difficult to follow the study process.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to will and difficult
Sentence: They may be lazy to study because they can not understand what the teacher explain.
Description: The fragment teacher explain . is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace explain with verb, past tense
Sentence: Teachers have occupy an important role to educate all students.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and occupy
Sentence: And I disagree that the children with variety of social backgrounds have to separately because it is bad impact for their mental development that the poor children background will feel inferior to rich children backgrounds.
Description: An infinitival to is not usually followed by an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to to and separately
Sentence: In contract the rich children will be arrogant to other children that having low economy backgrounds.
Description: The token that is not usually followed by a verb 'to have', present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to that and having
Sentence: Beside that the teacher can use same method to teach them, and also it will be more eficiently time to teach in the class.
Error: eficiently Suggestion: efficiently
Sentence: For estance, if some students have less ability to understand the lesson quickly, and they mix with clever children, so the students with low abilities will difficult to follow the study process.
Error: estance Suggestion: No alternate word
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Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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