It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school To what extend do you agree or disagree

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It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In this modern globalization, there are problems with education on children. Schools allow admissions from numerous societies and children are given more occasions to mix with those who were coming from different social backgrounds and with various abilities. I will argue about this statement, the topics have two sides of advantages and disadvantages. Although parents has important future plan for their children, they has predictions for educate and life for children.

In general, growing of children depends on their parents and environment. Sometimes, the young parents feel less confidence to manage growing and academicals for their kids. But then again, they believe the teachers in school. In contrast of, a lot of people desire to give better for baby.

Firstly, the baby will grow with high education, good attitude, polite, good skills and abilities, learn from their families. For example: since I was in playgroup, I was thought of education and interaction with another kids, in my class, I had disciplines of schedule, began study in early morning than another students in my class, start from praying together, study with saying word by word, exercise to write words, letters, numbers and symbols. Another activities were calculated with tools of my daily life, for instance, how many oranges in the basket, and so on. After school, my mother brought me to a sport course. The sport area is near from my school which about 200 metres. In here, I had new friends and learnt to do sport together, before started, we warmed up together. Sometimes, we were running around of main hall area. Next, we made a competition to run in track area which has four lines in a loop. I remembered this moments as it just happened yesterday, because these events gave me social ability towards other kids which unlock my abilities and skills.

Secondly, children almost had no activities outside school activities, so that they would go home already after school. That was why children would not have enough social ability and grow slower than the others when they grow up, because they lacked interactions with another people.

In conclusion, I think that parents have to plan extra activities for their children to enhance their abilities and skills which they need in the future.

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Although parents has important future plan for their children, they has predictions for educate and life for children.
Although parents have important future plan for their children, they have predictions for educate and life for children.

feel less confidence to manage
feel less confident to manage

Sentence: For example: since I was in playgroup, I was thought of education and interaction with another kids, in my class, I had disciplines of schedule, began study in early morning than another students in my class, start from praying together, study with saying word by word, exercise to write words, letters, numbers and symbols.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and kids
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and students

Sentence: Another activities were calculated with tools of my daily life, for instance, how many oranges in the basket, and so on.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to Another and activities

Sentence: I remembered this moments as it just happened yesterday, because these events gave me social ability towards other kids which unlock my abilities and skills.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and moments

Sentence: That was why children would not have enough social ability and grow slower than the others when they grow up, because they lacked interactions with another people.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and people

Sentence: Sometimes, the young parents feel less confidence to manage growing and academicals for their kids.
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