The line graph below shows the number of people who surf the two new music websites.

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The line graph below shows the number of people who surf the two new music websites.

Given below is the line graph illustrating the number of people who surf to two new music websites, namely Music Choice and Pop Parade, over a period of 15 days. At first glance, the amount of users who visited the Music Choice website was significantly higher than the Pop Parade.

Generally speaking, from day 1 to 3, there was a minor fluctuation in the number of people who browsed the Music Choice web, at the average of 120000. On the contrary, there was a huge fluctuation in the amount of visits at the Pop Parade site.

The Music Choice showed a sharp decline in the number of visitors from day 3 onwards, while Pop Parade reflected the opposite pattern. In addition, a decline to approximately to less than 40000 people was accounted by the Music Choice website from day 6.

Whilst the Music Choice demonstrated a dramatic rise from day 9 (150000), the Pop Parade followed the former pattern from Day 11 onwards (110000). Lastly on day 15, the Pop Parade number of visits plummeted to approximately 70000 while the Music Choice rose to peak at 170000 of visits.

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