In many countries children are engaged in some of kind paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.what are your opinions on this?

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In many countries children are engaged in some of kind paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
what are your opinions on this?

It is generally believed that kiddo-worker is invaluable. However, others presume it is important to conduct their experiences and mature developments. Yet, there is no doubt on both ideas, when two type of works charge on them.

The firs type is entrepreneurship. The individual businessman organizes private enterprise within range innovations. Seemingly, this criterion would modify the good young entrepreneur, while the 12-aged arrange the idea how to earn money independently. This idea stimulates children to sell valuable goods in the market, then he would compete with another supplier goods. This competition provokes the young business freelancer to think creativity how to gain the number of buyers with supporting good negotiation, communication, and persuading. As a result, improvement skill of business would occur on the young entrepreneur. Over all, freelance business is suitable to upgrade children’s creativity skill.

A second would be contrasted obviously to the first. The reliance young workers could be controlled by the boss of company, commonly this tragedy happens thorough poor young Chinese, while many illegal cooperation recruits young Chinese to work with small salary. This business would dull their creativity because of the fear of manager’s commandment. Although, young employer could get paid work, this activity operates children like robot.

That is great idea to put children into business field, however, the company of tyrant cages creativity of children. NBC news reported there were lots of young entrepreneurs succeed in democratic nations, such as: America, French, and England. But, unfortunately the youngest did not meet that opportunity in the communist nation, such as: China. In other hand, the population of young entrepreneur raised 50% in development country, Indonesia, over five years, 2001-2005.

Finally, getting paid work among children is bot bad idea at all, as long as, freedom of applying creativity conduits on children employer rather than blocking it.

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