In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?
It is undeniable that Students get something not good activity in their school. It is happened in many countries in the world which students always imitate all of their habit especially negative student behaviour. The problems come from two reasons of student problems behaviours. The causes, are bad habits student in the school and wrong community who are chosen by them.
Student bad habits occur when they are living in the school such as They always come late in school because at night they always play with their friends. The effect of their bad daily activity is not good personality, such as became lazy man, cheat in exam, never do task and feel happy when they do fighting. The solutions of student bad habits these are, join leadership training in the school or get personality training in the school.
The second causes that students get problems because negative behaviours is joining in wrong community in the school because They will copy the bad attitude from their friends in their group or they are instructed to do some criminals by their friends in the community. For example, The community instruct the member to smoke in everyday and do anarchic in the school or outside of school. They must think too hard before they join a student club.
It can be concluded, that student must filter to chose best friends. However, All students do not have a good attitude. Moreover, student must make sure that the community who they are joining have positive activity and not disturbing citizens in their environment.
Sentence: The problems come from two reasons of student problems behaviours.
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Sentence: The causes, are bad habits student in the school and wrong community who are chosen by them.
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Suggestion: Refer to habits and student
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Sentence: The effect of their bad daily activity is not good personality, such as became lazy man, cheat in exam, never do task and feel happy when they do fighting.
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Sentence: For example, The community instruct the member to smoke in everyday and do anarchic in the school or outside of school.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace instruct with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment do anarchic in is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace anarchic with adverb
student must make sure that the community who they are joining have positive activity and not disturbing citizens in their environment.
student must make sure that the community they are joining has positive activity and is not disturbing citizens in their environment.
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