In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it ?

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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.

What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it ?

Nowadays entire world is becoming over populated. Every countries peoples are facing myriad competition to settled their life with dignity but due to few significant causes even though highly qualified graduates are living their life with unemployments.
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There are many reasons compel to go to discuss about this major issue elaborately. Fast of all, I would like to involve government straightway because, after a completion of post-graduation from a particular subject an adult graduate can be judged by an asset for the country. If government create an opportunity to contribute in countries economi than they might definitely accelerate their best level to meet governments requirements. Second of all, education system should be built based on national criteria rather than international especially in developing countries, thus qualified graduates can find their opportunity in their homeland and consequently they do not need to think about any migration plan to setup their life with an unknown and discomfort life or culture.

However, literally developing countries graduates are heavily suffering from this situation because of slow growth of business and also for several wrong steps of planning by governments. For instance, I have a pal who have completed his nuclear engineering from a pioneer university around two years ago but still he is going through unemployment life due to lack of opportunities and less institute by which further research can be carried out on nuclear engineering activities. So consequently he is planning to move out from his own land to cup-up with others who are really not belongs to him. Additionally I would mention another fact of this merit and qualified graduates unemployment issue, which is scarcity of developed and well-recognise business, which might create an enormous number of job but unfortunately due to over population and abundance figure of candidates it is becoming absurd.

Before conclude this essay I would like to put all things in a nutshell to break out a important point of this weight-ful statement that only government's best concern is the finest way to solve this problem and this might take a or couple of decades.

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Sentence: Every countries peoples are facing myriad competition to settled their life with dignity but due to few significant causes even though highly qualified graduates are living their life with unemployments.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to countries and peoples
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and settled

Sentence: If government create an opportunity to contribute in countries economi than they might definitely accelerate their best level to meet governments requirements.
Description: The fragment government create an is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace create with verb, past tense
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to governments and requirements

Sentence: However, literally developing countries graduates are heavily suffering from this situation because of slow growth of business and also for several wrong steps of planning by governments.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to countries and graduates

Sentence: Before conclude this essay I would like to put all things in a nutshell to break out a important point of this weight-ful statement that only government's best concern is the finest way to solve this problem and this might take a or couple of decades.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to Before and conclude

Sentence: If government create an opportunity to contribute in countries economi than they might definitely accelerate their best level to meet governments requirements.
Error: economi Suggestion: economy

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