in many part of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past. give a reason for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge and experience?
People in our era has no interest as having many children. It is because some of them be bother by working and studying and do not have a time for carrying about having many children. Family’s today were different with yesterday’s family which have a big family and many children.
I believe there were the whole point of the benefits for having big family. Firstly, they have never feel alone. It due to the family always been there if one of them have a trouble. They help each other. I also believe that members of family has a loyalty, although sometime they got fight each other and they mad among them. However, these situations do not make their love decline. Their loving teach them to become a loyal person. Secondly, the family should support and motivate their member in any condition. When they got trouble in studying. They could acquire the members for teaching. Togetherness teaches them to become unpretentious, social person, and not self-interest person. The last is education and experience learning. We learn everything in this world from our old parent, father and mother, grandfather and grandmother, old brother and sister. They teach us how to become brave, intelligence, strong, and having good behavior. Family is the best teacher.
Besides the benefit, there are also disadvantages for being a big family such as problem in financial. A big family need much money for survive. In consequence, one of the family should spend their time for hard working. In commonly, father is who earn money. If his members is more than 4 people, including children and wife that he should work hard. Also sometimes mother takes an action to help her husband earning money. It because children need a lot of money for education. A qualified school is expensive, not cheap anymore. Other problem, they need more space for living, wide room and wide house.
In a nutshell, being a big family is something fun. We have brothers and sisters for chit chat and never feel alone. However, for making big family happy, money is crucial thing to hold out our life. In consequence, children have to ready that is left by their parent.
Sentence: I also believe that members of family has a loyalty, although sometime they got fight each other and they mad among them.
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Sentence: Their loving teach them to become a loyal person.
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Sentence: A big family need much money for survive.
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Sentence: In commonly, father is who earn money.
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Sentence: In consequence, children have to ready that is left by their parent.
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