In many parts of world, children lives were very different from today. what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of life for children in the past?
In the modern era like now, the children lives ware changing. technological developments lifestyle change’s of parents make children’s live were swing today. The habits of children in the past is totally different with children’s habits at the time. There were advantages and disadvantages both of children’s live in the old days and today.
Children in history were not feeling of outcome of technological development and existence change of parents. youngsters had not a TV, computer and mobile phone in the past, so they were able to spending free time to playing outside with other kid’s who live nearby, the benefit of the situation’s were the children probably will not being introvert because they were talking frequently with everyone they want. Outside of that, without electronic the children were not under pressure to being successful at school because they had more time to brush up. The more benefits were they can spending more time with their parents than with baby sister, way of life parents in the history had more free time cause quality time with their youngsters.
However there were a number of disadvantages because had more free time, the children were enjoying dangerous activity like climbing trees or swimming in rivers, in my opinion it was becoming high-risk for them, because when they was swarming the trees, the kids presumably fall from trees and when they was swim at the rivers, the children probably swept away from the rivers current. On the other hand the juniors in the history were not feeling safe when they were going home from school, contrasting with the kids lives today, they were waking home from school rather than being taken in their parents car.
In conclusion the children in the old days were not introvert because they always had more time to have interaction with other inhabitants. However they were high-risk because they had more times to played dangerous activity.
Sentence: In the modern era like now, the children lives ware changing. technological developments lifestyle change's of parents make children's live were swing today.
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Sentence: Outside of that, without electronic the children were not under pressure to being successful at school because they had more time to brush up.
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Sentence: The more benefits were they can spending more time with their parents than with baby sister, way of life parents in the history had more free time cause quality time with their youngsters.
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