Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and include your opinion, supported by examples.
We have several International sports event such as olympic games, world cup, Europe cup, winter Olympic games and so on. For every event one or two country become hosting. Some people think if their company become host, is very good and has a lot advantage, meanwhile other people do not think neither.
Hosting of national sports events has several benefit. Firstly, country must be ready for the games so it has to build a lot of building such as, stadiums, hotels, roads, restaurants. Consequently, this make a lot of job for people. Secondly, government earn a lot of incoming form these games, such as incoming from sell of ticket, show live games. Finally, industries of tourism has improved. . During the games, a lot of fan, journalists coming to country for watch games .For example In last world cup in China, some people who fallowed the games, temped to travel China and see big wall of China.
On other hand, there is some disadvantages. Everything that built for this event, might be useless in future. People who coming to watched games sometimes damage our historical building. They are thief. All money spend on these games, can use for build new hospital or school instead of big hotels or stadiums, there are very useful for a country. During the games, host country responsible for security of all athletes, reporter. Sometimes these people have bad behavior so impact on politic relation between countries.
To sum up, I want my country host an international sports games because advantages are more than disadvantages.
Sentence: Consequently, this make a lot of job for people.
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Sentence: Secondly, government earn a lot of incoming form these games, such as incoming from sell of ticket, show live games.
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Sentence: All money spend on these games, can use for build new hospital or school instead of big hotels or stadiums, there are very useful for a country.
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Sentence: During the games, host country responsible for security of all athletes, reporter.
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Suggestion: Refer to country and responsible
Sentence: During the games, a lot of fan, journalists coming to country for watch games .For example In last world cup in China, some people who fallowed the games, temped to travel China and see big wall of China.
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