The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows a drawing of Garlsdon town. The governments of this town plan a new supermarket. This supermarket will be placed in two choice areas.

In general, both of two areas are crossed by railway and high way.

The first possible location is in the suburbs. This location is more relax because it takes long distance from industrial areas to catch this area. However, train, bus and car are allowed to catch this area. This area is closer to Hindon rather than Bransdon and Cransdon.

However, the second possible area is totally different than the first one. It is located in the Town Center where there is no traffic zone. Also, this area is full of housing around it. It would be the crowded market. It is placed near with industrial areas as well. What is more, it only crosses by train while car and bus only cross around it.

In short, the second possible area is more recommended because its place is in the city center. As a result, it will be more crowded when it is built.

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