More house are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations would it be better to build houses in existing towns and cities, or to develop new towns in rural areas?

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More house are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations would it be better to build houses in existing towns and cities, or to develop new towns in rural areas?

It is true that most of countries are improving their population, and citizens will need new housing for live. In my opinion creating new cities could be a good way to increase the condition of housing, rather than to involve existing towns and cities.

On the one hand, improving housing in towns or cities creates over population. In this case, it will build many problems, which can disturb people who live in the cities. Pollution is one of the big problems, which can damage people life such us getting diseases. According to research medical organization, 58 per cent people who live in the towns have more possibility to obtain disease, rather than people live in the rural areas. Hence, people who live in the towns have quite little opportunity to get job. It might possibly be caused competition to acquire work, which is difficult because many people have same ability as other unemployment.

However, I believe that there are many benefits if people live in the new towns. Many natural resources are provided by new towns where people obtain healthy environment. Governments also become easy to manage population of their citizens, which is difficult to perform it in towns where have high population. In new cities are new employments that it will stipulate.

In conclusion, it seems to me that creating new tows is not easy to perform it, but it will provide many advantages for people.

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Sentence: I this case, it will build many problems, which can disturb people who live in the cities.
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Sentence: Pollution is one of the big problems, which ca damage people life such getting diseases.
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minimum 250 words

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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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No. of Different Words: 128 200
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flaws:
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You got only 5.0 because there are only 237 words. 250 words are the minimum. Put more contents next time.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 237 350
No. of Characters: 1134 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.924 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.785 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.514 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.221 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.407 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5