Music for individuals and societies

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Music for individuals and societies

Nowadays, music becomes essential for people either for individuals or societies. Every country has own characteristic for music. Some opinions show that music gives advantages for individuals and societies. However, other views against that opinion, music could have a negative impact for them.

Some people believe that music could give some positive influences. First benefit for individuals could increase individual’s productivity to run some activities such as working or studying. Music takes a role as stimulant to trig human’s spirit and the level of intelligence is determined by influencing of music during pregnancy period based on scientific research. Second benefit music also is useful for societies. To illustrate, music could be medium to help other people. It occurs when some disasters make people suffer, and then some socialist held social concert to collect money as humanity.

Other people think that music brings a negative effect for individuals and societies. Some opinions mention that music merely becomes source of riot. In Indonesia, when musical event held, there are many people come to attend music concert that is performed by famous artists and musicians. That is true, sometimes some events always result some accidents for individual. Many cases show that spectator involves dispute, as a result, they fight each other. It can make some people die and injured.

In my point of view, music should get particular concern from individuals and societies due to music have many roles. Music could keep peaceful in the world through beautiful instruments. Also music could concentrate people all over the world. It means that music give some benefit impacts for people’s life. Besides, some undesirable aspects appear when musical event held to entertain societies but some people make trouble, as a result, chaos condition cannot avoid and then some accidents occur toward them. Many people regret about it, people should enjoy music wisely.

To conclude, music is as media to associates among societies in this world. Similarly, music becomes vital for societies and individuals because hold essential roles to create peaceful for people’s life.

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Sentence: It means that music give some benefit impacts for people's life.
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Sentence: Music takes a role as stimulant to trig human's spirit and the level of intelligence is determined by influencing of music during pregnancy period based on scientific research.
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