A person should never make an important decision alone.Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support answer
It is universaly acknowledged that man is a bundle of error an account of he/she suffered from various difficulties. Moreover, a single person cannot make a good decision alone, specially without having an experience. It is well said "Good decision comes from experience and experience comes from bad decision" .Here, i am personally inclined the favour of statement with some reasons and examples too.
There are various points to endorse my views. First and foremost , decision making process is sensitive, some time we left some errors that lead us to disastrous results. Hence, while making an salient decision we should always take support from veteron people as they come across from distinct type of ups and downs. Furthermore, they throw light on particular matter which ara dark to us. As a result, chances of mistakes and difficulties curtail automatically.
In addition, 'one and ona makes eleven' , so before taking any decision we can also involve othet person to increase the number of ideas and views for our decision. Thence, one single person cannot be blammed if decision is sometimes proove negative. What is more, they also help us socially, financially and emotionaly in trouble , for example; some folk choose their life partner of one's accord and sometime they divast their life by choosing their decision of life alone. As a result , they maximize their burden and problems.
At length, taking ideas from intelligents, knowledgeful, better drilled person can help us to take decision easily.Thus, choosing a best idea make our life optimum once for all. Moreover, process of decision making is not a piece of cake for everyone. Hence, initiative of any decision should be in proper way.
To encapsulate, while taking decision in life, a person should take advise from others , "An important decision always have long lasting impact ".
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Hlo sir , is her representation better now than previous essays ???
is representation a matter why she scores less than 7.5 or 7.0 ???
please analyze her essays once again and suggest what aspects of essays (representation, vocabulary, sentence structure) need improvement ????
Well, look at the flaws: No.
Well, look at the flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
Though she only has three grammar errors, but all of them are serious. And 12 spelling errors are too much. Also she didn't put punctuation marks properly. E-rater is sensitive and gave her a low mark. So put everything together, the essay can only get 6.0.
We have put warnings for her from the first essay that punctuation marks should be put properly. E-rater is sensitive. But she never listened to us.
Her language is good, look at those attributes:
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
If there are no grammatical issues, no spelling errors, format is correctly, Yes, the essay can get 7.0 or maybe 7.5 from those attributes.
To get better marks next time, what should she do:
1. Read a good grammar book. Try not have grammar errors. Users lost credits easily because of grammar issues.
2. Practice typing though she doesn't need to type in real IELTS test. It is not a waste of time since she will use typing in the future life. She may do a spell check before submit essays.
3. Have a correct format of essay. Put punctuation marks properly. Again this is not just asked by essay E-rater, it is necessary for her future university projects.
If she can make some changes, we will see great marks in her essays next time.
It is universaly acknowledged that man is a bundle of error an account of he/she suffered from various difficulties.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? How to use'an account of'?
Sentence: At length, taking ideas from intelligents, knowledgeful, better drilled person can help us to take decision easily.Thus, choosing a best idea make our life optimum once for all.
Description: The token a is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to a and best
Sentence: To encapsulate, while taking decision in life, a person should take advise from others , 'An important decision always have long lasting impact '.
Description: The fragment have long lasting is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace have with has
Sentence: It is universaly acknowledged that man is a bundle of error an account of he/she suffered from various difficulties.
Error: universaly Suggestion: universal
Sentence: Hence, while making an salient decision we should always take support from veteron people as they come across from distinct type of ups and downs.
Error: veteron Suggestion: veteran
Error: ups Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, they throw light on particular matter which ara dark to us.
Error: ara Suggestion: ?
Sentence: In addition, 'one and ona makes eleven' , so before taking any decision we can also involve othet person to increase the number of ideas and views for our decision.
Error: othet Suggestion: other
Error: ona Suggestion: one
Sentence: Thence, one single person cannot be blammed if decision is sometimes proove negative.
Error: proove Suggestion: prove
Error: blammed Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: What is more, they also help us socially, financially and emotionaly in trouble , for example; some folk choose their life partner of one's accord and sometime they divast their life by choosing their decision of life alone.
Error: divast Suggestion: divest
Error: emotionaly Suggestion: emotional
Sentence: At length, taking ideas from intelligents, knowledgeful, better drilled person can help us to take decision easily.Thus, choosing a best idea make our life optimum once for all.
Error: intelligents Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: knowledgeful Suggestion: knowledge
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Characters: 1500 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.967 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.553 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.703 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5