The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The chart illustrates the proportion of electricity production by energy source in Australia and France in 2 decades in 1980 and 2000. Generally, the statistic reports that France produced more various units of electricity than Australia.
The major units of electricity production in Australia were coal, Hydro Power, oil, and natural gas which coal always dominated among the rate and it showed a sharp increasing number in 2 decades with 80 rates.
France and Australia had an extremely decrease of natural gas between 1980 and 2000 which fell 18 digits for Australian and 23 digits for France. On the other hand, nuclear power in France rose steadily from 15 to 126 units when Australia produced nothing of it. Oil gas in France increased slightly only 5 ranges while Australia decreased regularly with 8 rates.
Overall, France was higher production of electricity by fuel source than Australia between 1980 and 2000 which nuclear power became the highest production in France in the last decade.
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'which' is not used properly in the essay. Check out online how to use 'which','that'.
For example, 'which' can be replaced by 'while' at the following two sentences
Sentence: The major units of electricity production in Australia were coal, Hydro Power, oil, and natural gas which coal always dominated among the rate and it showed a sharp increasing number in 2 decades with 80 rates.
Sentence: Overall, France was higher production of electricity by fuel source than Australia between 1980 and 2000 which nuclear power became the highest production in France in the last decade.
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